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Public celebrations are a waste of money..?

Nov 24, 2012   #1
Public celebrations (National days, Festivals) are held in many countries some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons and examples according to your knowledge and experience.

Celebrations are integral part of our life, no matter whether it is private or public. However, some people feel that public celebrations are not useful and a mere wastage of time and money, others oppose. I feel that, there are so many reasons to give importance to public celebrations in our busy schedule of life.

To begin with, celebrating national days gives us an opportunity to honor and remember the person or incident behind it. New generation will come to know the importance of these national heroes and the honoring is passing into new generation. Furthermore, these celebrations inspire to read and understand what they did for the country or community. It may further influence the younger people and guide them to right direction. For instance, while celebrating the Independence Day both children and adult remembering the heroes who sacrifice their life in the freedom fight.

Secondly, it is an occasion of get together. People from different parts of the country, state or even family come together. For instance, for celebrating Christmas not only families live apart, but also, the people of the whole community gathering in the churches. These celebrations leave an unforgettable memory in minds of the participants. Additionally, it helps to strengthen old relations and make new one. Mingling of different age groups, culture and social status enrich the knowledge and outlook.

Lastly, these great occasions are beneficial to exhibit the tradition of a country or a community. Practice is the best way to protect a culture from extinction. Besides, it provides a chance for the young generation to understand and follow their traditional values and styles. During these celebrations, people are usually wearing their traditional dresses and enjoying customary foods. Moreover, it will be wonderful experience for people those who are not familiar with these traditional practices. Some of the festivals are of international attention, attracts tourists, and thereby foreign exchange.

To conclude, the opponents of public celebrations may argue that, these may invite unexpected accidents, and over expanses of the state or country, especially in poor countries. However, I strongly believe that, it is an indespensible part of our life, because it provides get together, an occasion to remember great people and helps to maintain cultural identities.

Nov 24, 2012   #2
However, some people feel that public celebrations are not useful and a mere wastage of time and money, others oppose. (seems a bit wordy and a little bit confusing, you actually dont need this)

simply talk about your ideas rather than the opposing.

Celebrations play an integral part of in our lives , no matter whether it is private or public. I feel that public celebrations are important because _________________ , ____________________ and _____________________. (your thesis) (also, add more to your intro paragraph. define public celebrations, etc)

to begin with ... gives us an opportunity to honor those in remembrance. Honoring national heroes will be passed down from generation to generation.

please review your essay and reread it, there are many grammatical errors. Restructure your essay so that it transitions better as well.
Nov 25, 2012   #4
Your 1st essay you closed before any correction. If it is by mistake, leave it open. You selected the button close thread while posting the essay. If doing like this no boby can put their suggestion. So avoid pressing 'close the thread', if you want to put more than two essays then you can close one thread and put another essay..

you posted your second essay in a correct way...
Keeep it up.

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