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Public figures should expect people interested in their privacy


hayaalqasem 9 / 17  
Aug 1, 2015   #1
I strongly agree with the speaker's assertion. The popular figures should realize that they have to lose their private life. This is the fame tax.

All types of media interested in their social ,economic,love stories and information to gain economic benefits.For example: news paper and magazine, television and internet,and radio broadcast the daily life of politicians,actors,presenters and singers.That will increase the sales figures of publishers, and advertisements. we can take the story of last presidents of united states of America Bell Clinton with his love Monica in 1996. Their love story was widespread in the world. IT is considered as global issue being regarded the president of most powerful country.He suffered the comments from critics in the media, conflicts with government official and depressing in the relation with his family.This scandal affected Clinton's public and social life while the owners of media earn millions.

Although the fame achieve a wonderful and an amazing life for those famous figures, they must take into consideration the deterioration and implications of their deeds and behaviors in whole affairs. As politicians,officials or diplomat will be investigated by their government . While art stars will be under-controlled from their fans and audience.They are fond of daily details of social and economic events. For example:the singer Briny Huston was focused by her fans to inform how mush is her wealth, who married, how many children do she has,etc.In conclusion, my view is the prosperous and fascinating life of public figures is restricted by the circumstances ft the society and perspectives of people but that does not warrant the media to spread the gossip. They must be punished by government and regulate their publishing by rules that take in to account their feelings and privacy.

Dawn01 19 / 33  
Aug 1, 2015   #2
Hi, hayaalqasem !!!

Here I make some suggestions:

1. Please write the question completely so that readers enable providing meaningful feedback for your writing.

2. It is better if you give a space among each paragraph because your layout is important when you write an academic writing. Paragraphing also helps readers to understand your ideas easily. I can't distinguish the introduction from the body and the conclusion. Is this a paragraph or an essay.Personally, my first impression was bad because of the disastrous layout.

3.It's better that you state what type of essay are you dealing with, whether it's an SAT, TOEFL, TOEIC, IELTS or other type of essays

4.As for grammar, style and structure:

-All types of media interested in their celebrities social life,economic ,their love stories and buzz information to gain economic benefits.

-For example: news paper and magazine, television and internet,and radio broadcast the daily life of politicians,actors,presenters and singers.That will increase the sales figures of publishers, and advertisements.

Magazine, TV, internet and radio coverge of politicians' intimicies as well as their daily lives increase the sale figures of publishers and earn them cash.

-we can take the story of last presidents of united states of America Bell Clinton with his love Monica in 1996. Their love story was widespread in the world.

A concreate example is Bill Clinton's love story and extra-maritial releation ship with Monica which become wide spread in the world.

-IT is considered as global issue being regarded the president of most powerful country.He suffered the comments from critics in the media, conflicts with government official and depressing in the relation with his family.

Technological means of communication threatens the president of the most powerful country in the world and put his future in doubt. In facts, He recieved harash critics from pundits, conflicted with government and caused the distress of his family.

-Although the fame achieve a wonderful and an amazing life for those famous figuresDespite famous' wonderful life , they must take into consideration the deterioration and implications of their deeds and behaviors in whole affairs

-As for P oliticians,officials and diplomats will be investigated by their government , they are always watched by both government and public.

-While art stars will be under-controlled from their fans and audience
Artists also are strictly supervised by fans, paparazzi and autograph psychos.

-TheyMasses are fond of daily details ofas well associal and economic events. For example, .t he singer Briny Huston was focusedalways targeted by her fanswho want to inform how mush is her wealth, with whom is she married, how many children do she has,etc

- In conclusion, my view is that the prosperous and the fascinating life of public figures is restricted by the circumstances ofthe society and perspectives of peoplepeople's attidues but that does not warrant the media to spread the gossip.

- They must be punished by government andin order regulate their publishing by rules that take into account their feelings and privacy.

( You have to sperate this paragraph from the 2nd)

Good luck !!


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