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Public transportation makes that less exhausts are ejected from motorbikes and cars into the air


tangthidiepanh 2 / 3  
Jun 9, 2015   #1
Topic: in about 140 words, write a paragraph about the advantages of using public transportation

Help me correct my paragraph, please!
Nowadays, there are many means of transportation, but using public transportation has a lot of advantages. The first benefit of it is the reduction in the air pollution. The reason for that is the exhaust ejected from motorbikes and cars will be lessened. For example, going to school by bike is good for both the environment and your health. Secondly, one of the positive effects of using public transports is diminishing the traffic accidents. For instance, using bus to go to work is safer than travelling by motorbikes and cars. In addition, it is clear that using public transportation mean saving money. By going to work by underground, you can save money for some plans such as: going on picnic, going shopping,... In conclusion, there are many helpful influences on our life if we use public transportations

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Jun 9, 2015   #2
- The first benefit of it is the reduction in theof air pollution.

- The reason for that is the exhaust ejected from motorbikes and cars will be lessened .

- SecondlySecond , one of the positive effects of using public transports is diminishing the traffic accidents.

- For instance, using bus to go to work is safer than travellingtraveling by motorbikes and cars.

- By going to work by underground, you can save money for some plans such as: going on picnic, going shopping,etc.... .

- In conclusion, there are many helpful influences onin our life if we use public transportations

Tang, I made a few corrections on your paragraph.

- proof read all the time

- the use punctuation mark, when giving out examples and you have to end it, you can use "etc." but not the consecutive periods (...)

- this paragraph is quite short and all the while I was thinking it's just an intro but writing a conclusion proved me wrong, I guess you need to expand your idea.

- I found one spelling mistake but hopefully it's just a typo, otherwise turn on your spell check all the time

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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