Very interesting introduction, but there is an issue with the introductions you write. There are lots of details in them, so I don't need to read the rest of the essay. And introduction needs "blueprint" too, which is lacking in this introduction.
whethereither played with teamteam or against a single individual interactive/individual ones
Sports, whether played with team or against a single individual, is a competition that measures player's determination and fervor
sports is plural while you wrote the whole sentence for a singular subject. Not sure if it is correct
Thus, it is no surprise that some players might surpass their limits in order to emerge victorious over their rivals.
suprise is noun and you cannot use it as an adjective. I would say "there is no doubt about ...", "undoubtedly ..."
but because I wanted to show him my passion anddetermination (repetition). You could change the structure of the sentence to avoid the repetion. For example "but I wanted to prove it to myself that I can make something impossible, possible by working hard and perseverance ".
This is why I think sports should be played
dont repeat this sentence. In fact it is not necessary to write this at the end of the fist body paragraph.
not sure if it is a good idea to use this term as it is informal. you could say "they would not take the sport serious, preventing them from being benefited by proper exercising"
Many parents or
the coachs would n'tnot mind, after all, children goof around all the time, but they do not realize the danger of this action.
To give you some ideas as you asked for, I would say doing a competitive sport would provide you with a chance to practice how overcome stress-induced tasks, especially by doing individuals sports. I had been in such situation and I needed to learn how to get over the stress and concentrate on my job as an athlete. Second, engaging in competitions will give you a world of opportunities to extend your social life. How? well, competitions means travelling to different parts of your county, if you do it in national level, or to other countries, if it is done in international level. In this way, you can make more friends from different regions of your countries or all around the world. If you talk to Olympians the first privilege they point out about being an athlete is that they have friends in any spots of the world.
Hope this helps.