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toefl - what are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'friendly and trustworthy'


aldebaran 8 / 17 2  
Feb 14, 2014   #1
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Neighbors are people who live near us and this means that they will have some influence over us, especially our life. Their behavior can be decisive for us in order to get peace in our homes, or just to spend a good time with our families. From this point of view a good neighbor is necessary for all of us, but what are the qualities of a good one? In my opinion, a good neighbor must be friendly and trustworthy.

First and foremost, be friendly and easygoing person is the most important requirement for a good neighbor. People who are friendly and easygoing are most receptive than any other. They can accept criticsm and advices without lost control. Imagine if you have a neighbor who used to listen music every night and you cannot sleep because of this. The only way you can solve this is talking to him. If he is a friendly man, he will hear you without to get mad and, most important, he will understand your point. Moreover, some people who are far away from their families can find this quiality very helpful because they can share time just talking with their neighbors.

Furthermore, a good neighbor must be a trustworthy person. A person who you can trust is an appreciated person no matter what. You can be sure he would help you if you need, he would keep an eye over your home if you travel away for some days and he can give you a hand with some issues of your home or family. This is a very important in these days because our current style of life is very time consuming and we need some extra help especially with issues related with our home and kinds.

In a nutshell, having a good neighbor is very important for everybody. About their quialities, I mentioned some such us friendly and trustworthy that are determinants for me, but there are a lot more and they will depend of what is important to each one.

Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Feb 14, 2014   #2
Neighbors are people who live near us and this means that they will havesomegreat influence overon us, especially our life .

.... the last part is redundant, so I cut it off. Also, the neighbors have a significant influence on our lives. This is more obvious especially when you have real bad neighbors :D

From this point of view a good neighbor is necessary for all of us, but what are the qualities of a good one?

.... The first portion had been told repetitively :(
Avoid repetition.
OP aldebaran 8 / 17 2  
Feb 14, 2014   #3
yeah, I though the same about my repetitions but couldn't change it because I was run out of time. It took me 29 minutes.
I wonder if the structure is ok.
thx for your help.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 14, 2014   #4
As for the structure, you are somewhere there :D .... Include examples of more specific nature in the body paras. That is a must in TOEFL to earn a good score. You don't have to give too many reasons to support your opinion. One reason per body para is fine. But make sure you give a specific example for that reason.

yeah, I though the same about my repetitions but couldn't change it because I was run out of time. It took me 29 minutes.

Practice by following a good structure is the best medicine for this issue :)
OP aldebaran 8 / 17 2  
Feb 14, 2014   #5
This a great forum. Really.
I have 1 month to improve my skill in this issue. this is why i will post a new essay every day for your comments.
Thx!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 14, 2014   #6
Thanks for your appreciation :) Yes, this forum is a great platform for collaboration. We all help each other in view of bettering everybody's writing skills. So, I hope you'll continue to be with us helping so many others who need your help :)

Provide useful comments to others' threads and we will keep providing our comments to your threads :)


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