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Jaanu 3 / 8  
Apr 15, 2014   #1
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Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

It is a god gift that having good neighbors who live near us. Whether we have an own resident house or rending place, we can't choose our neighbors. According to my opinion, if we get good neighbors who is very helpfulness and friendliness, our life would be lasting very smoothly and happily.

To begin with, if our neighbors are very sociable, we can acquaintance with them easily and then tied-up our relationship step by step. Consequently, both of us can understand each other easily. For instance, when I was studying for advanced level exam, our neighbor was not very genial person. Although, they knew that I would have exam by the next month, they listened radio by having high volume. It made me so many disturbed and I couldn't concentrate well on studies. On the other hand, if they were very amiable people, I would have easily explained my situation or they could understand themselves.

Additionally, other significant character of neighbors should be very helpful. If they are very supportive, we can help each other all the time. Every member of our home can't be there all the time. In some urgent case, some people would immediately give hands without any hesitation. For example, my brother is living far away from us. Once, when his wife was pregnant and he was not at home too, she got unconscious. Then, their neighbors took her to hospital and informed him. Then, after the treatment she was alright. Because, the neighbors were very kind, they gave their hands on time. It was a great support to him.

Finally, in my opinion, neighbors are having strong influence in our life. Even though, some people say that we are nothing to do with neighbors, if we get great helpful and friendly neighbors, it would give more benefits than nothing.

dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 15, 2014   #2
It is a god gift that having good neighbors who live near us.

Having good neighbors is a great blessing.

. Whether we have an own resident house or rending place, we can't choose our neighbors

How you live is not really relevant to this topic. Always keep your writing aligned with what your prompt suggests. Now introduce the background of the issue by paraphrasing the prompt. In my view, the above sentence should be removed from the intro.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 15, 2014   #3
To begin with, if our neighbors are very sociable, we can acquaintanceassociate with them easily and then tied-upstrengthen our relationship step by stepgradually.Consequently,As a result, both of us can understand each other easily. For instance, when I was studying for advanced level exam, our neighbor was not very genial person.our neighbors were not so caring type of people. Although, they knew that I would have exam by the next month, they listened radio by having high volume. It made me so many disturbed and I couldn't concentrate well on studies.
OP Jaanu 3 / 8  
Apr 15, 2014   #4
To dumi & Pahan ,
Thanks for giving me suggestion. I will follow them.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 19, 2014   #5
neighbors are having strong influence in our life

neighbors strongly influence attitude and behavior of people

According to my opinion

Write "I think", instead of according to which is used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have said
A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.
Itsyasmeens 2 / 10  
Apr 25, 2014   #6
Ok, so the idea is good but some sentences arent written in a right form so here's the correction:
Whether we have
our own resident house or rending place.

According to my opinion, if we get good neighbors who are very helpfulness and friendliness, our life would be lasting very smoothly and happily.

our neighbor was not very genial person. The right form would be: "Our neighbor was not a very genial (or caring ) person.

(, they listened radio by having high volume ) the right form is: since you are talking about you "neighbor" then he is singular so you better use "he/she listened to the radio on a high volume"

It made me so many disturbed and I couldn't concentrate well on studies.
Right form is:
That made me so disturbed and I couldn't concentrate well on my studies"

Anyway, the idea is so great and the examples too


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