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Qualities of good co-workers - first of all, it is most important how they treat their work.


monicacho 3 / 18  
Jul 27, 2010   #1
I'm preparing toefl, can you feedback for me???

"What are the qualities of the good coworker?"

Our job is a second home and our co-workers are second family. We spend lots of time with our co-workers in our places of work. In my opinion, good co-workers have some of certain charateristics. There are willingness and positive attitude.

First of all, I think they have willingness to do work. If they do not want to do work, we can not work together. Because he or she do not finish his or her work on time. It is just his or her own work, it will not affect to us. However, if it is a project, our project will be delayed, and it will impact on lots of aspects such as our team's image made bad, we have to do over time work, and so on. When I had one presentation in my work, I had to prepare with same period co-worker. Thus we divided our subject for searching information before we make a source of presentation. Although one co-worker was so lazy, and she did not get any information until meeting that we made for preparing speech. As a result, we spent more time than we planned, I and another co-worker had a difficult relationship with her.

Also, positive attitude is necessary for a co-worker's good condition. An old saying in Korea is: "one good saying can pay for debt'. We would like to talk to smiling people and we prefer to talk with kind people. Those kinds of attitude or dispositions can mitigate conflict between co-workers. According to in the Ministry laber of Korean, people who have positive minds have less arguements than the others. Because of their attitude, if they create a good image to somebody, they can be forgiven easily. Even though they may have misunderstanding or miscommunication, they can solve the problems through conversing with the other people.

Finally, I believe people need to develop for willingness and positive attitude before they start to do work.

sanap 2 / 5  
Jul 28, 2010   #2
I thought the organisation of your essay was not very clear. I think you should change the voice too.

I think its better to start with an introduction on how you define a good co-worker (and not what an office is). And then, in the body, explain each quality with a supporting example and conclude your essay.
OP monicacho 3 / 18  
Jul 28, 2010   #3
READ ABOVE

how about this one?? little bit more clear??
I hope it is better than first one... I think it is hard subject for me... ;(
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 30, 2010   #4
I think you should change the voice too.

This is an interesting suggestion. What do you mean? Also I like your idea about using a definition.

Hey, Maria gave lots of great corrections. Monicacho, if you want to practice you should type the essay again and make the necessary changes.

I like this part:
Because of their attitude, if they have good image rapport with somebody, they can be forgiven easily. Even though they have misunderstanding or miscommunication, they can solve the problems with conversation. the other people.

I just changed image to rapport. Also, you don't need "the other people"at the end.

:-)
OP monicacho 3 / 18  
Jul 30, 2010   #5
I think that meaning of I through general describing person.
Do I have to do??

yea~ Maria gave to me lot of corrections, and I'm so sorry..
you catched what I did... I will do it next time that I will type the essay again..

I learnd some new word and grammar corrections.

Thank you for everybody~~ : )
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 1, 2010   #6
I think that meaning of I through general describing person.
Do I have to do??

I don't know what you mean by this...
It is indeed good to describe the person and what makes her or him a good co-worker.

Also, don't be sorry for mistakes!! Mistakes enable us to learn! :-)
OP monicacho 3 / 18  
Aug 3, 2010   #7
Thank you very much, Kevin~!! : )

However, I found if I want to make a new thread, I have to put 2 post...
It make me scary, because if I try to correct them, I can give to them wrong way.
I mean I can give to wrong information.

I want to put my essay on essayforum, but that condition was made me be stress.
I hope I get enough ability for helping sombody's essay.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 4, 2010   #8
I understand why that is scary! Many other students said the same thing you said. They are afraid to talk to others about their essays, because they are all still learning. However, you can tell someone what part of the essay you liked, what it made you think of, what you did not understand, and how it made you feel. You do not have to make corrections.

You can make a post to tell someone your reaction to their essay, and you do not have to make any corrections. Just tell them something about what you thought when you read the essay.

:-)


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