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The question is "How have you changed in the last five years?"


Tomomi 4 / 15  
Sep 20, 2010   #1
This is a question in an English club which I joined the other day.
Please give advices about grammar, vocabularies,....
Any ideas would be aprreciated.

There are many factors which can change a person's personality. There are also many experienced things will be able to change a person's thought. I believe it is true because I am a totally different person than I used to be five years ago.

After graduating the college, I joined the company which specialized in polishing LED glass. My position was in charge of managing inventory for both domestic and oversea corporations. I worked twelve hours a day with only one day off on weekend in five consecutive years. Even though the job really challenged me enough, I still felt so hard to keep on that job. I had no time to go out with friends, to go shopping, to do what I wanted to do. I was just like a working machine day after day. Rarely, I had two days off on weekend and I started feel lonely. I didn't know what to do or where to go on those days. I can say that I was an introversive person. I was afraid to meet new people or to challenge the new things in my life. I still remember there was a period of time that I just hoped some accidents would happen to end my life.

Then, one day, I realized that the life in my college' days was totally different. I used to be an active and very happy girl. I lost myself and I wanted to recall those days. I gave myself full courage to quit my high-paid salary job. After that, I went to United State-Los Angeles to start my new life as well as to improve my favorite second language -English.

My life in United State was more incredible then I thought. During my school days, I met people all over the world. After classes, we went to the beach to have conversations in English as practicing. I learned too much about the culture, the people in other countries. Of course, like other people, I felt culture-shock when living there at the first time. Then, the fact of culture-shock made me more open-minded and more flexible to accept other people's ideas. One year studying in the US has completely changed my personality as well as my thought. I feel more confident to do everything including my present job and my hobbies. I now enjoy my life very much. I have a passionate concern for even little things such as directing foreigners whenever they lost their way in my city, or just writing an essay on Essay.forum, etc.

Everything in this world is the basis of 'cause and effect'. Sometimes, I think if I hadn't felt a deep sense of isolation during my working days, I would never have had a chance to study abroad and to realize my life is amazing. A little message for all the college students is that if you are confused and don't know what to do sometime in your life, just go outside of your country and challenge the new things. One thing for sure is that it would open your way in your life.
eram 1 / 2  
Sep 20, 2010   #2
states

lower case - english

lose

this is great i am glad you are enjoying your life and hope you continue to do so:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Sep 23, 2010   #3
Oh, I see what Eram is talking about:

My life in United State was more incredible then I thought.

Look, you also need to change then to than! :-)

I still remember there was a period of time that I just hoped some accidents would happen to end my life. ---Wow, this is dark and gloomy! When you hope for this, you must really hate your job! Well, I guess it is time to start doing work you really care about. I bet you would be able to do very goodwork with bilingual children.

Everything in this world is based on the law of 'cause and effect'.

I want to tell you about the verb tense that uses the word "had."
Then, one day, I realized that the life in my college' days was totally different. I thought, "I used to be an active and very happy girl." I realized that I had lost myself and I wanted to recall those days.

REALIZED and WANTED happen in the past tense, but LOST happened an even longer time ago. When you are remembering a situation in the past, and you mention something even further in the past, you need "had."

Oh, actually I see that you already understand this rule, because you used it perfectly here: Sometimes, I think if I hadn't felt a deep sense of isolation during my working days, I would never have had a chance to study abroad and to realize my life is amazing.

Have no doubts as you continue with your work. You are obviously going to be a success in what you do!

I notice you mentioned EssayForum in your essay! That is really nice, thank you.
OP Tomomi 4 / 15  
Sep 26, 2010   #4
Thank you so much, Kevin.

I think I know the rule of using Past Participle, just made mistake in that sentence.
Yes, you are right." I realized I had lost...."(Of course, you are always right...hihi)

I will be more careful when writing a sentence.

Thank you for your comments. I will keep practicing.
Please continue to help us.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Sep 29, 2010   #5
hihi

I've never seen the word hihi typed before! ... or, actually I thought it was spelled hee-hee with a hyphen.

:-)
OP Tomomi 4 / 15  
Sep 29, 2010   #6
Oh, really?
Actually, I don't really know how to express that. I always type "hihi..."to my friends.
Thank you anyway, Kevin.

Tomomi


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