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Some questions about Membership Recruitment


ddtloan 1 / 1  
Aug 23, 2018   #1

I want to become a member of your organization



What do you want to learn and develop for yourself? And how can we support that?
What I want to learn and develop for myself is how to communicate with other people and how to work effectively. I prefer hanging out to talk to friends than chatting through social network or message. However, I often fall into the awkard case. I don't know what I could say to strengthen the conversations. Even sometimes, the conversation will not be amazing as I imagine. I need to focus on goals I would like to achieve and how I can use my time in the possible way. As I can see from booklet, I think your organization have the versatile environment I desire to become a different person I used to be. What is more, I also can expand relationships and have friends who are fully experienced and kind. Although I also have some shortcomings, I believe your organization will help me be more active, more mature and have many factors of global citizen.

Which field do you want to work in the future? And why
I would like to join in working the field "project management". Because I like organizing events, programs. I usually watch some variety shows especially Korea, China or America shows and I'm into that producers create their shows and bring audiences about relaxing and entertainment. So if I become a member of your organization, I think I will have a chance to learn about building a project or an event or running programs and know how to plan amazing and atractive contents for everybody as well.

Share with us your strengths and weaknesses
My strength is give respectfulness for everyone. I'm trying to listen to their opinion and lend an ear for their difficulties they have to face.

I am honesty in all my relationships. Honesty is essential to make the community become better. I think we can do this through truth telling, truth speaking, truth living, and truth loving. . If you are, you will reap benefits by doing so. Everybody will respect you and willing to help you anytime when you need.

I'm a shy person, which prevents me from public speaking. At that time, I also feel nervous and my voice seems to be getting softer and softer. Maybe because a part I lack confidence.

Please tell us about your biggest failure in the past and how you overcame it?
Honesty, my biggest failure in my life is not trying for something. When I had to make my own decision for study program: normal or all subject in English. Actually, I knew that an international environment would be a perfect opportunity with many benefits for me and I also wanted. But I thought it was too difficult and full of stress to persue this with the fear of English. I'm not good at English enough to get on this program. So I did not choose it and gave up a better chance. After all, I'm trying to change the way of my thinking, myself as well. Learning to think positively and taking small step by step will help build my confidence. I will move forward to achieve my goals because if you do not try, you will never know.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Aug 24, 2018   #2
1. You need to shorten this response to indicate what you want to learn, one simple reason why you want to learn how to do it, and how the organization can help you achieve that. You do not really address that in your response. The point of the question is to receive a response that shows how familiar you are with the helpful programs of the organization. Be specific with your plans for improvement through their help. Right now, you could be talking about any similar organization and not this one specifically.

2. Use a comma between the words management and because. Then replace the word "because" with "since" to connect the two ideas leading into "I like organizing events..."

3. Your strengths and weaknesses should reflect abilities that can be useful to the organization you are looking to become a part of. What you describe here are character traits that do not necessarily translate into a strength nor a weakness. Think about what the organization objectives are and what aspects you can help strengthen in the group and what aspects you can help in but are not very skilled in accomplishing. Those are actual strengths and weaknesses. It is all about explaining how you can help enhance the experience of being a member of the organization.

4. Your response is not really considered a failure. What you indicated is more of an apprehension. A failure is something that you actually did which did not turn out to have a positive result. How you overcame that failure explains how you turned the negative result or experience into a positive one. You should change your response to this question to a more relevant one.
OP ddtloan 1 / 1  
Aug 26, 2018   #3
Thank you so much for spending your time to help me check out and giving me beneficial advices! Love youuuuuu


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