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Radio is the best way to get news, while others believe that TV is better for this purpose


humashamsi 1 / 1  
May 31, 2015   #1
In this era of technology and globalization all of sphere life has change dramatically and television news has no exception and more popular in nowadays. In contrast to this, some people believe that radio news are still sublime for certain people. In this essay, I will discuss both views,

In the first place it would be quite true to say that television provide to us immediate news without any delay. Due to current advance of technology of VSAT which make it possible and convenient. One illustration of this is that watching live news of any incident. To put this issue into perspective, second most valuable reason which is worth considering that is television news are more entertaining which may catch our attention. In fact, people never get bored when they watch news in television medium. This seem to be true that picture is moving around and give extra information while on radio as we listen the voice.

In addition to this, another positive element playing a significant role in television news. It present the news in detail and presenting way. People will get more information as they see in television. For instance, when we watch news about car accident as we can easily observe the damage and route cause and even though we are not there.

Yet, there is dark side of picture which advocate that older people considered the radio news because they are using so long, become habitual and they believe that radio is ideal for them. Secondly, radio news are easily available in anywhere and we can access news while doing. For example, when we are in car and same time access the news. Lastly not least, people will get distract if they watch news in television. This is because, television has a countless entertaining program which may catch our attention.

To put in nutshell, I pen down saying that it is indeed debatable issue which need further analysis and discussion. However, in the light of above plausible argument along with examples it would be quite safe to conclude that advantages of watching a television are complete out weight its disadvantages in many different aspects

Hana_Nguyen 2 / 3  
May 31, 2015   #2
In this era of technology and globalization all of sphere life has change changed dramatically and television news has no exception and more popular in nowadays.

In the first place it would be quite true to say that television provide provides to us immediate news without any delay.

To put this issue into perspective, second the second most valuable reason which is worth considering that is television news are more entertaining which may catch our attention. In fact, people never get bored when they watch news in the television medium. This seem seems to be true that a picture is moving around and give extra information while on radio as we listen hear the voice.

It present presents the news in detail and presenting way. People will get more information as they see in on television.

Yet, there is a dark side of the picture which advocate that older people considered the radio news because they are using used so long, become habitual and they believe that radio is ideal for them.

Lastly, not least, people will get distract if they watch the news in on television.

To put in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that it is indeed debatable issue which need further analysis and discussion. However, in the light of the above plausible argument along with examples it would be quite safe to conclude that advantages of watching a television are complete out weight its disadvantages in many different aspects
mMaftuna 2 / 3 1  
Jun 1, 2015   #3
Hi, humashamsi

To be short about your essay, I think first you have to divide your paragraphs, as long as you do this, it will be clear for the reader to recognize your arguments and follow your ideas.

Then, you should better work on your grammar because i have noticed some grammartical errors such as: ( television news has no exception ) instead you should say : television is not an exception, It present the news in detail and presenting way--------It presents the news in detail

The last one, develop your ideas, you let them open, in the essay in some places you stated your opinion and left them open
IqbalThemi 44 / 46 13  
Jun 1, 2015   #4
I see that you need to rewrite your introduction to lead your reader to understand the content of this essay since the first glance.

In this era of technology and globalization all of sphere life has change dramatically and television news has no exception and more popular in nowadays. In contrast to this, some people believe that radio news are still sublime for certain people. In this essay, I will discuss both views,

This is my example,
In globalization era today, advanced technology changes dramatically piece of entertainment media. As such, television as one of modern entertainment media now become considerably more popular for plenty of people. Having said that, others argue that radio is still sublime in providing news to society. Therefore, I would contend that for people living in large industrial city, television brings convenience to update news, whilst radio can be still alternative media of individuals staying in a pretty village.Hope this helps.
EF_Carol - / 145 39  
Jun 4, 2015   #5
the advantages of watching television...outweigh...

This is a fair conclusion, based on your evidence, but you need to have a thesis sentence which introduces this.

I will discuss both views...

This is not a thesis. You need to say TV is better,if that is your perspective,
right fro the beginning of the essay.

I think your order is good as you show radio and TV positive attributes.
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Your vocabulary and grammar are good. Sentence variety is excellent!

In the first place...In addition...

These should start new paragraphs. It is better to have a five paragraph essay, as that's standard.With this order revision, I think you would have a stronger piece of writing.

Good job!

ef. _carol
lovejapanjapan 1 / 4  
Jun 4, 2015   #6
I think you should rewrite the introduction since this is not so interesting and no hook for me to read further. For the whole essay, it's language wise, ideas are clear enough yet not well-planned, lack coherence and unity almost in all paragraphs.


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