With the development of internet and other advanced technologies, some people believe that the traditional radio seems to disappear from our daily life in future. I do not agree with this view, even though I do agree that the usage of radio is decreasing dramatically.
... good introduction :)
Admittedly, A largeamount of audiencesnumber of people stopped listening to radio because they tend to spend their time in other entertainments such as internet exploration, watching TV, etc..
Admittedly, many people have abandoned radio as a source of entertainment due to the availability of other popular options such as internet, Television etc.The internet brings a different way of interaction (on demand) , which allows individuals canto access the information they wantedwant a ctively rather than relying on listening to radio passively.
.... the logic of your argument is not very clear to me here. Also, don't have the tenses mixed up.
Pay attention to clarity of your sentences.