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About MY, Rahul, brother from PUNE


vijay kumar 1 / -  
Jul 13, 2011   #1
My brother's name is Rahul. His birth date is 12/7/1985.His native place was PUNE.
From his childhood he was having good build(healthy).He was a naughty boy , i came to know when my grandpa told me about his naughtiness.

He used to take me to the school with him, as he was my elder brother.We were having a school bus for school.He was a sincere student of his class. he was always topper from his class.

He was having interest in cricket. we used to play cricket after completing our school homework. He was a good runner in school days. Many times he took part in marathon.

He secured 70% in 10th std & 65% in 12th std. After then he took admission to ART faculty. The reason behind these, he was trying to crack the UPSC exam side by side.He also completed his apprentice from AMMUNITION FACTORY.And before a year he joined the FACTORY.now he is persuing MBA in MARKETING MANAGEMENT.
isai 12 / 111  
Jul 13, 2011   #2
My brother's name is Rahul. His birth date is 12/7/1985. He was born on. His native place was is PUNE.

During his childhood he had a good health.He was a naughty boy , I came to know from my grandpa as he was sharing our childhood milestone.

He used to take me to the school with him, as he was my elder brother.We were having a school bus for school. He was a harworkding student of his class. He was always in top ranking in the class.

He was interested in cricket. We used to play cricket after completing our school homework. He was a good runner in school days and he took part in marathon as well.

He scored 70% in 10th std & 65% in 12th std. After that , he took admission to ART faculty. The reason behind this, he was trying to split the UPSC exam side by side ( whatd o yo mean ) Vague...

He also completed his apprentice from AMMUNITION FACTORY before a year he joined the FACTORY.Hence , he is persuing MBA in MARKETING MANAGEMENT.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 15, 2011   #3
He was a naughty boy , I came to know from my grandpa as he was sharing our childhood milestone. ----This part does not really make sense!

Great ideas, Isai!

His purpose was to to crack the UPSC exam side by side.

He also completed his apprenticeship at an ammunition factory.

And before a year he joined the factory. Now he is perusing an MBA in MARKETING MANAGEMENT. Marketing Management.
Do not use all capital letters.

:-) You still have a lot of work to do! Keep practicing!


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