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IELTS TASK 1 - The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy in 2007


madmoiselle 21 / 33 5  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy in 2007 is depicted in the table. Overall, it can be seen that Japan has the highest passengers and the heaviest cargo carried. However, the lowest passengers and cargo carried is the USA.

It is noticeable that in 2007, the UK and Italy possessed nearly similar number of people using the train. In Britain was 5.9 passengers, while in Italy was 5.5. Then, the number passengers of Japan were twenty seven, which is much higher compared to the USA that only 0.3. Moreover, the distance of passengers per head of population between the UK and Italy were slightly different, wherein Italy is 10 KM longer than the UK.

In addition, the weights of cargo carried by Britain, Japan and Italy in 2007 were almost equal. The heaviest cargo was Japan at 23.01 billion tons, and then followed by the UK 22.2 billion and Italy 21.9 billion. However, the weight cargo carried of these three states was extremely far in comparison with the USA that only 2,880 billion tons.




ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Aug 12, 2016   #2
Hi Rere, here's my analysis towards your essay.

1st paragraph:
- The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan, and Italy in 2007.... (comma before "and" is needed for listing data)

2nd paragraph:
- It is noticeable thatTo begin with, in 2007, the UK and ...
- In Britain was 5.9 passengers while in Italy was 5.5. (no comma needed)
- ... were twenty seven, which iswere much higher (...) that only had 0.3.
- ...were slightly different. The rail transport in Italy was approximately 10 kilometres longer than in the UK.wherein Italy is 10 KM longer than the UK.

Overall, I like the way you deliver your report. It is very informative and clear to the reader. Yet, there are some grammatical and punctuation marks that still need to be considered. Few more practices would be helpful towards your future test. Good luck for that :)
adepani3112 5 / 8  
Aug 12, 2016   #3
The rail transport in the UK, the USA, Japan and Italy ...

Try: throughout the UK.....

don't forget the and after Japan,

Overall the guy above me covered.
hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Sep 4, 2016   #4
In Britain, there(need verb)waswere 5.9 passengers, while in Italy wasthere were 5.5.
... the UK and Italy were slightly different, where in Italy is 10 KM ...


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