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The rain water is sending for purification to a treatment plant, then goes to houses for drinking


irhame 52 / 50 25  
Oct 5, 2015   #1
the diagram below shows how rainwater is reused

Answer:

The diagram illustrates the ways rain water is recycled. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest proportion of rainwater is used for several times as a result of water recycling. In any case, while water is collected in dam and tank, all water flow through river to mountain at the end of this process.

Initially, the amount of rain water stored in dam is sent to water treatment plant for purification. Then, it is brought to house for drinking. At the same time, the water which fall down from cloud to proof automatically flow to rainwater's tank, and it is used for other purposes such as washing plates and pouring water to plants. Following this, the wastewater is recycled again in wastewater treatment plant for resulting clear water which is reused for house's consumption. Eventually, puddle's water on the yard and dirty water drain to mountain through river.



vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 5, 2015   #2
Irham, yours is a unique, if not refreshing take on the rainwater filtration process. Among all the essays I have read so far based on this prompt here, yours is truly up there with the best of them. You have made great progress when it comes to presenting your ideas in the written word. While still not perfect in grammar, you have come across as someone who really understands the diagram and has enough of a command of the English language to explain the procedure in simple terms. Here are a few correction that I hope you will study in relation to this essay and, when possible, I hope you will apply it to your future essays as well :-)

Overall, it can be seen that the greatest pro portion of rainwater is used for several times

while water is collected EITHER in A dam OR and tank

all THE water WILL flow through THE river to THE mountain at the end

.rain water stored in THE dam is sent to water treatment plant

brought to house HOMES for drinking

the RAINwater which fall down from cloud to proof automatically flowS to THE rainwater's tank

and pouring water to WATERING plants

wastewater is recycled again in THE wastewater treatment plant, RESULTING IN for resulting clear water

reused for house's HOUSEHOLD consumption

puddle's water PUDDLES on IN the yard and dirty water drain to THE mountain through river.
OP irhame 52 / 50 25  
Oct 5, 2015   #3
thanks mister, i am always waiting for your valuable feedback


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