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The rank of education of Bulgaria citizens who chose to live in another country


Bekuk22 15 / 21 3  
Sep 26, 2016   #1
The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who want to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the rank of education of Bulgaria societies who want to live in another country from 2002 to 2008. Overall, it can be understood that the highest proportion in rank of education is secondary education while the societies who hold lower education and higher education are lowest.

Base on bar chart, the highest percentage of education rank to Bulgaria of societies is secondary but it experienced a slight decrease to nearly two-fifth percent every year. Besides, people who hold higher education show a slight rise of 9%.

The primary and lower education experienced a gradual increase from 2002 to 2008. At beginning, the both of them saw a increase 8% in 2002, then the proportion of the primary and lower education increased slightly just 1% but next year the percentage of primary and lower education experienced a rapid growth of 13%.

Giansy11 18 / 32 5  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
Hii Bekuk22..
i dunno your real name, but i guess you are my classmate, because we got the same topic.
There is no doubt, that you have great skill in writing, but lemme give you some corrections.

. rank of education = education level
. Bulgaria societies = Bulgarian, Citizen of Bulgaria
. At beginning not fit for last sentence
BAMS14 18 / 29  
Sep 26, 2016   #3
hallo
there are few advice for you

Base on bar chart, the highest percentage of education rank to Bulgaria of societies is secondary but it experienced a slight decrease to nearly two-fifth percent every year. Besides, people who hold higher education show a slight rise of 9%.

The primary and lower education experienced( experience or experienced be carefull because that is different meaning) a gradual increase from 2002 to 2008(how many??) . At beginningavoid use first sentences with at begining you could use firstl or the fisrt or first of all) , the both of them saw( WHO??? NEED O) a increase 8% in 2002, then the proportion (...) experienced a rapid growth of 13%.

CREATE GOOD FLOW AND CHECK YOUR GRAMMAR FIRST,BEFORE UPLOADED


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