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IELTS Essay : Reading fiction or watching movies : Introduction only


w_even 6 / 14 1  
Oct 23, 2012   #1
Hi All,

I have written an introduction of the following topic. I would highly appreciate if you could help me improve it. Thanks,

Topic
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

Introduction
Going to movies and reading fiction are two of the most popular pastimes of many. Devoted novel readers assert that their hobby is much more entertaining than sitting before a screen for 2, 3 hours watching a movie. Whereas movie lovers consider this claim a prejudice and speak high of their favorite activity. If I were to opine, I would agree with the former group based on various reasons.

"If I were to opine, I would agree with the former group based on various reasons." Is this sentence correct to be put here ?

Thanks again.

humanx 3 / 5 1  
Oct 23, 2012   #2
where is the rest of your essay? it seem to me like an introduction only !
the formal essay is formed of three basic parts that are the introduction, body and the conclusion .
so you had missed two parts .its incomplete IELTS task two essay.
check it again please
OP w_even 6 / 14 1  
Oct 23, 2012   #3
hi humanx,

for the moment I am focusing on Introduction only that is why it did not put rest of the essay here.
I consider that Introductions are pretty important as these creates the first impression on the reader.


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