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Real or imaginary that you plan to do this summer. Try to think topic about time with friends


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Sep 18, 2021   #1

my plan to hangout with friends



Dear Chloe,
After finishing the final exam two weeks ago, the university allows a student to take a five-day summer break. During that time, I planned to spend time with my friends.

The first day, I went to my friend's house to cook together, watch the movie we were watching and play games and so on with each other and so on. On the second day, I wanted to do something outdoors so we went camping together and had to prepare everything like food, water, equipment to set up the tent and activity we look forward to the most for the day its bonfire hope everything will be perfect as I thought. The next day, we will go swimming in the morning and the afternoon activity is playing badminton at the training ground with everyone in the group. The following day, we'll have breakfast and coffee with our family and then go shopping for the things we need. On the last day, we plan to have dinner together at restaurants and go to see horror movies that are very popular recently. Those are the things I want to do after the exam is full of fatigue and pressure. If it were you, what would you spend your time doing with your friends?

I'm looking forward to hearing from you
Bich
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Sep 19, 2021   #2
and so on with each other and so on

What? This presentation does not connect well with the previous presentations. Avoid vague references since the letter calls for precise descriptions.

I planned

Wrong time reference. The instruction asks for future plans. These are yet to happen so the past reference, as in, activities already done and completed cannot be used.

Divide the activities by day and paragraphs.That way a more thorough idea presentation can be completed based on a daily activity focus. Luch a format can use a more active voice and allow the writer to inject more excitement to the future plans.

The writer should be sharing the letter with the friend who will be involved in the activity. Instead the writer is asking for an opinion The writer is using the incorrect letter format.


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