How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing.

What factors contribute to job satisfaction?

How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

My attempt:

Opting for a decent job that a person highly satisfies with demands thoughtful considerations. After looking at such critical contributing factors argued by many scholars as compensation packages, job autonomy and recognition from management, my personal sentiments are on par with the idea that management acknowledgment simulates employees' satisfaction. Such an ideal working environment, unfortunately, is almost non-exist in the reality.

Management recognition of employees is in no doubt a catalyst to job satisfaction. Graphic designers, for instance, greatly desire for receiving motivation given by senior management because their works are thought to be valued. Bankers, who work at Goldman Sachs as ample example, do demand not merely much discretionary bonus, but also recognition from management after closing every big deal. These make apparent that psychological support positively correlates with level of job satisfaction of specific worker.

The aforementioned situations are neither common nor plausible in most organisations due to the fact that fierce competitions are commonplace among employees and that frameworks set by graphic designers in the case of the previous paragraph hinder the creativity of novel advertisements designs. Thus, the management either overlooks the individual's accomplishments of workers as workers are in harsh competitions, or ignores the creativity of works as the existence of stereotyping in the mind of management. Overall level of job satisfaction of employees, therefore, exhibits a drop naturally.

To sum up, although competition among operators and expectation of management could end up with vicious cycle, workers are recommended to by all means draw the eyeball of management by gearing up themselves. Indeed, only a minority of workers but never all of them will win out and satisfy with their jobs finally.

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Your opening sentence should hook the reader. So it should be an interesting, relevant and meaningful sentence. The above is not very well presented and therefore fails to serve its purpose :( .... you can tell the same idea in a more simple and interesting way -

Job satisfaction is one of the most important considerations for one's well being.
You show a tendency to present your ideas in a very complex manner. Especially your sentence structures are too complicated and they make them reader tired. Use more direct speech instead of passive sentences and present your ideas with better clarity.

Hi dear,

I'm trying to do so but found it quite uncomfortable seems because I have unfortunate got used to the style of GMAT...

Could you please also give me more comment to my new piece of writing?

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Many thanks!! :(

hi, I am confusing about the subject verb agreement in this essay

this some of them


If may keep this sentence, you need 2 verbs while you mention one conjunction.



but also pairs with not only


I think for 1 conjunction you put too many verbs.


I cannot find the verb.

hopefully this help enough

Hi dear,

Could I consider DEMANDS as the only verb needed here?


Question:

Can I consider
After looking at such critical contributing factors argued by many scholars as compensation packages
as a modifier?

Just like
After looking at these factors,my personal sentiments ARE..

hi, I mentioned "that" as conjunction need two verbs. Based on your sentence above, yap "demand" is verb, so you need I more verb.

as far as my knowledge
this pattern commonly using in formal writing
S, appositive, V
take a look yours
Subject : After looking
appositive : job autonomy and recognition from management
you should put verb after appositive #like pattern above


I didn't attach any literature which explain about this pattern, I just share which I know from my tutor. I am also open any correction for my comments :)

Hey thanks for your prompt response :D
And I got these questions:

Opting for a decent job that a person highly satisfies with demands thoughtful considerations
montegrappa:
Could I consider DEMANDS as the only verb needed here?

hi, I mentioned "that" as conjunction need two verbs.
Based on your sentence above, yap "demand" is verb, so you need I more verb.
Q1: If one more verb is need, would you please advice where should I put the verb in :-]?

as far as my knowledge
this pattern commonly using in formal writing
S, appositive, V
take a look yours
Subject : After looking
appositive : job autonomy and recognition from management
you should put verb after appositive #like pattern above
montegrappa:

After looking at such critical contributing factors argued by many scholars as compensation packages, job autonomy and recognition from management, my personal sentiments are on par with the idea that management acknowledgment simulates employees' satisfaction.

Q2: Can I consider the text in Italic format as a subordinate clause?
After looking atsuchcritical contributing factors argued by many scholarsascompensation packages, job autonomy and recognition from management , my personal sentiments are on par with the idea that management acknowledgment simulates employees' satisfaction.

The aforementioned situations are neither common nor plausible in most organisations due to the fact that fierce competitions are commonplace among employees and that frameworks set by graphic designers in the case of the previous paragraph hinder the creativity of novel advertisements designs.I think for 1 conjunction you put too many verbs.

I agree

Overall level of job satisfaction of employees, therefore, exhibits a drop naturally. I cannot find the verb.
Q3: Could "exhibits" acts as a word here?

I didn't attach any literature which explain about this pattern, I just share which I know from my tutor. I am also open any correction for my comments :)[/quote]

I really really appreciate your comments! As a non-native speaking I really don't know what I am getting wrong without the the intuition.

... this sentence is very confusing. Just like dumi, I too cannot understand what you are trying to say here. Try more simple sentence structures. There is no point in trying complex sentences if no one can understand what you mean.


.... Why not present this idea in a more simple and interesting way?... also, "catalyst" is generally a substance or person. Here, "recognition" is not such thing, but a motivational factor;

Recognition acts as a great motivation factor for many people.