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Writing Task 1: The reasons why adults take part in the course and how its cost should be shared


tienhoang2912 1 / -  
Sep 5, 2021   #1
The charts below show the result of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reason why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.



Here is my essay:

The charts provide information on the reason why adult population sign up for the course and how such tuition fees should be shared. In general, the most attractive of students to take part in education is interest in subject, and individuals is the main fund of course payment.

Turning to detail, in the bar chart, interest in subject and gain the qualifications top the chart, take up 40% and 38%, respectively. Besides, around 20% adults decide to join the course because it is helpful for current job, improve prospects of promotion and they enjoy learning. Finally, meeting people and change in jobs stand at the bottom of figure and are responsible 9% and 12%.

On the other hand, as can be seen from pie chart, people pay almost thier tuition fees themselves, make up to 40%, followed by employer pay with 35%. Meanwhile, taxpayer occupies over half as much cost as individual does. An interesting feature that purposes of enhancing job prospect and enjoying learning share the same figures of exactly 20% each.

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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 11,568 3753  
Sep 7, 2021   #2
The charts provide

Read the instructions again. The images must be individually identified for accuracy purposes.

most attractive of students

You are not writing a fashion and beauty report. Never use non-academic word descriptions. This phrase, in particular, does not meet academic audience standards. Remember the audience and use audience related reference words in the report.

Turning to detail,

On the other hand

The second reference must be used in tandem with, " On the one hand" as you are trying to establish a valid comparative discussion. The confusing use of anchor phrases rather than topic sentences lower the clarity and grammar accuracy score of the presentation.

thier

Learn to proofread and spellcheck. This is a minimal L R deduction but, a deduction nonetheless.


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