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[TOEFL] Reasons to attend university or college; 'higher hierarchy in society'

yin 12 / 38  
Oct 30, 2009   #1
Dear friends,
Plz help me to correct any mistakes.
Thanks so much in advance :)

People attend college or university for many reasons (for example, new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The development of economic market in the world has led to lots of changes in human life which include the advancement of education. Demands for gaining knowledge and endeavors to approach higher status in society and many other reasons have forced more and more people to attend college or university. In my own opinion, nowadays, people tend to participate in university or college because of two main following reasons.

First, people have a tendency to attend colleges or universities because they want to increase their academic knowledge that effectively serve their career. Plus, this is considered the fastest way to reach the goal of the majority of people. In addition, one of the most important functions of universities and colleges is to equip students with necessary skills to be well done when pursuing their lives' dreams. For example, you will have a chance to get to know many specialized subjects such as Econometrics, Accounting Theory, Economic Laws, and so on if you are major in Business Management. This will provide you with background knowledge which helps you a lot in the future.

Second, attending college and university to get certificates is also the main purpose of some people. We can not deny that certificates play an important role in one's life if he wants to take promotion in his company or get a higher salary. For instance, compared with a normal blue - collar employees, those who have qualification have higher status and are more respectful than the others in the same company. As a result, all people who have enough good conditions decide to attend university and college. This also result in the problem that parents and relatives always have live up to their children to successfully fight for a chance at university, which has become an urgent problem in modern life nowadays.

In conclusion, modern life has provided people with more opportunities to acquire better knowledge and chance to improve their education. Attendance in university and college is a chance like such. It helps people to stay up to date with information and approach higher hierarchy in society. There may be many other reasons for a person to decide to join in a university, and those are my points of views. How about yours?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 30, 2009   #2
Great job! Even though you are still working on perfecting your English, you have excellent structure in the way you write. You'll do very well!!

...or college because of the following two main reasons.

Plus This is considered the fastest...

For instance, compared with a normal blue-collar employees, those who have qualifications have higher status and are more respected than the others in the same company.
stevieg 2 / 3  
Oct 30, 2009   #3
You can talk about the emergence of new social norm that calls for people to attend colleges.
OP yin 12 / 38  
Oct 31, 2009   #4
@EF_Kevin:Thanks a lot,
I really appreciate your comments.
I'll try more and more.
Thanks again :D
fuhuanluck 5 / 11  
Nov 2, 2009   #5
i think you have done a good job, however , youhad better pay more attention to your beinnig of each paragraph.
try more,:-)
OP yin 12 / 38  
Nov 6, 2009   #6
Thanks for your help.
I appreciate it :D

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