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In recent days, shopping is not considered as a responsibility anymore


lyphung 1 / -  
Jan 4, 2023   #1

the transformation of shopping


In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.

In recent days, shopping is not considered as a responsibility anymore. Otherwise, it has increasingly become a leisure activity that people are really into. I do believe that this transformation has its pros and cons as two sides of a coin.

There are many compelling reasons why shopping became ubiquitous pastime for people in all ages. Initially, this activity can cheer people up. It is undeniable that purchasing something new makes we feel blissful and fulfill. For example, spending money on shopping does wonders for our mood whenever we are down. Moreover, shopping time is quality time for family to gather every weekends. In fact, many people have to work from dusk till dawn to bring home bacon, resulting less together time with beloved ones. We can witness that there are numerous family or couples spend their weekends shopping around in shopping malls.

On the other hand, shopping adversely affects people who are obsessed with shopping all over the world. It is true that shopping will be a positive habit if we can take its advantages. Nevertheless, it may cause us get into huge debt because of spending recklessly for inessentials. Another negative results of this tendency is the effect it has on youngsters, who spend time on shopping centers with their friends instead of in school or library, for instance. Shopping is a time as well as money consuming, so it will be better for them to try healthier habits such as learning a sport or travelling.

In conclusion, while the potential advantages of shopping make it seem like a good idea, I suppose that this hobby does not completely benefit for consumers. We should mull over before purchasing things to avoid financially and mentally draining.
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Jan 4, 2023   #2
The essay will immediately receive a failing preliminary score. The writer has not followed the writing instruction as provided. He actually changed the writing instruction from the orginal single opinion essay to a comparative discussion instruction. While the writer did provide an opinion, it is not the correct or expected opinion presentation. Therefore, the writer has not fulfilled the major TA requirements. Receiving a non-passing score so early in the assessment process will definitely be a huge stumbling block to this essay receiving a passing score in the end.

Also unhelpful to the overall incorrect discussion format is the incorrect concluding summary as well. The writer presented an uncertain opinion that does not relate at all to the original discussion. This created an additional unacceptable and incorrect discussion conclusion. I am afraid this essay will definitely get a failing score.

In order to avoid future problems with response writing, the writer should learn the difference between the single opinion and comparative discussion prompts. That should be easy to identify using the following reminders:

Single Opinion:
- Do you agree or disagree
- To what extent ...
- Give your opinion and provide examples

Comparison:
- Discuss the advantage or disadvantage
- What are the pros and cons
- Discuss both views and give your opinion

These are the more commonly used writing instructions that can help the writer tell the difference in response styles.


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