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Over recent decades, people face tremendous transformation because of the cutting-edge of technology


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Aug 26, 2016   #1
Question:

There has been major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvement in people live. ( agree/ disagree)

Intro:
Over recent decades, people face tremendour transformation coincide to the cutting-edge of technology. Eventhough some people has contradiction idea regarding this phenomenon, I agree that technology has participate to improve people's life. Because, the major idea of manufacture technology to make mandkind's life be easier.

Conclusion:
To sum up, it is clear that advances technology improve people life. Although, some people had opposite thought, I assure technology can help people's life be better. It is imperative to utilize technology with smart usage.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 27, 2016   #2
Hi Seed.
Welcome to Essay Forum. You have been the right medium to improve your skill. You are supposed to harness this as well as possible. Well, let me help you to finalize this. These are my corrections.


Intro:
Over recent decades, people HAVE faceD tremendour TREMENDOUS transformation WHICH coincideS to WITH (Pay Attention to use of preposition) the cutting-edge of technology. Eventhough WHEREAS some people has HAVE (make you sure that you use verb agreement appropriately) A contradiction idea regarding ...

Because, IT IS BECAUSE the major idea (...) make mankind's life be easier.

Conclusion:
To sum up, it is clear THE AFOREMENTIONED EVIDENCE REVEALS that advances THE SOPHISTICATED technology improveS people HUMAN life. Although, some people had opposite thought...

Keep spirit.
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