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WHY SHOULD RECKLESS DRIVERS BE PUNISHED SEVERELY


andrew_li 1 / -  
Apr 20, 2012   #1
This is my first exposition.. Help me to improve my writing skill please.. Every single correction will highly appreciated

Some teenagers like speeding. Although they know that it is dangerous, they like speeding without thinking of the consequences; Therefore, reckless drivers should be punished severely. There are some reasons why reckless drivers should be punished severely.

Firstly, seeing speeding has caused many accidents, drivers should be more careful. Strengthen the law must be effective, so that drivers will be more careful.

Secondly, it is owing to driving recklessly might claim people's lives. It would not only take the victim's lives, but also affect the victim's relatives. Thus, reckless driver should be punished severely

It is clear that reckless drivers should be punished severely. We must do it to prevent more accidents. Beside it causes accidents, it would claim people's lives too

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EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Apr 24, 2012   #2
Some teenagers like speeding. Although they know that it is dangerous, they like speeding without thinking of the consequences;( being things like destruction, terrible injury and death) Therefore, reckless drivers should be punished severely. There are some reasons why reckless drivers should be punished severely.this is repetitive and unnecessary

Strengthening (I corrected this word) the law must be effectivemaintained, so that drivers will be more careful.
Secondly, it is owing to driving recklessly might claim people's lives. It would not only take the victim's lives, but also affect the victim's relatives. Thus, the reckless driver should be punished severely

I only highlighted areas which need improvement. The parts of your essay that you don't see here should stay. You may also mention that with harsh and severe penalties given to people who do commit this act, this can hopefully serve as an example not to follow for people who are tempted.

Good job!


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