Dear Moray House School of Education
The University of Edinburgh
It is an honor for me to give you information regarding my student, Clark Kent, for his intention to continue his master degree in your University. Firstly, I want to tell you that I knew Kent as his lecturer as well as his dean. He is a great student who has many achievements in both academic and sports field. He is a person who has a tendency to be active in numerous campus organizations, especially in the Faculty of Psychology. He was one of the ministers of Psychology Student Executive Board. Furthermore, he is extremely focused on his study. He, as the matter of fact, finished his bachelor degree solely in just under 4-year with 'Very Satisfactory' predicate. It means that he can manage his time accurately.
Secondly, in the sports field, he is a tennis player who succeeded obtaining a number of medals in the National Level of Tennis Tournament previous years ago. Then, he also involved Basket Ball and Football team in the campus as an essential player thanks to his powerful competence to lead his teammates in the game. Frankly, he has the potential to be a leader in or outside of the field.
Finally, I would argue that giving him a chance to be a student in your University is not an erroneous decision since he has all of the categories to be a successful person due to his high motivation, his attitudes, and the ability to learn quickly. In addition, his capability in sports and his vast knowledge of psychology convince me to give you a strong suggestion to accept him as your student. I assure that he will have an outstanding achievement in Performance Psychology Program.
Therefore, regarding this information, I hope that you should take it into account and can give him a chance to prove what I have said to you. Please contact me if you need further information.
Hi Muflih, first of all, I'm not sure if I get this right, you are writing on behalf of your professor? Well, if this is so, I think this is just wrong, not to mention how it is played hard on the essay.
Now, if I'm wrong, I must say that the essay is not written very well, somehow it is obvious that it is somewhat trying hard to fit in as a recommendation letter. For one thing, I believe a recommendation letter should have a relaxed feel, it should exude confidence and a letter that tells about you as a person, a student and more importantly what your hopes and dreams are in pursuing the University.
Muflih, I do hope that you will be able to clarify this or better yet, seek the recommendation straight from the professor or revise the essay to a standard fit for a recommendation letter.
I hope this helps.