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TASK 1. The recruitment of foreign language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007.


Ra_fhli 22 / 17 8  
Nov 15, 2015   #1
The recruitment of foreign language teachers in Ontario from 2001 to 2007 is presented by the graph. Overall, people who apply in France language experienced the highest level while English Language witnessed dramatically decrease over the time frame.

It is evident that in 2001, the number of applicant of English teachers was the largest at just over 70% instead French language which was still below of 70%. However, over one year, both showed a downward trend about 55%. The far gap showed from 2003 to 2005, France teachers increased continuously around 70% while applicants of English language showed at just only 40%.

Meanwhile, from 2005 to 2006 the same trend again is served by both subjects; the number of people who enlisted in both major showed a downward trend. French language decreased slightly to 68%, but at the end of the period rose minimally to 73%. Whereas in 2007 recruitment of English teachers still dropped to under 20 percent, it was approximately by 45% from the applicant of French language teacher.




ayaelsaka95 1 / 3  
Nov 15, 2015   #2
It is evident that in 2001, the number of applicantapplicants of English teachers was the largest at ...

The farbig gap showed from 2003 to 2005
Lucy Ngong 3 / 4  
Nov 18, 2015   #3
Hi Ra_fhli, many thanks for your advise in my essay.
I have some suggestion for you :
Overall, people who apply in France language experienced the highest level the higher( I think comparative is better than superative in this case.
but at the end of the period rose minimally to 73%reach a peak at 73%use idom help you gain vocaburary score
Have fun!
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Nov 18, 2015   #4
Rahmat, first of all, it's good that you plugged the graph in the essay, most of the students forget this part and it is crucial as this is the basis of EF contributors to give you sound advice.

Now, here's what I have for your analysis.

- Overall, people who apply in France language experienced the highest level while English Language witnessed dramatically decrease over the time frame .

- instead of French language which was still below of 70%.
- However, for over one year, both showed a downward trend of about 55%.
- The far gap showed from 2003 to 2005, FranceFrench teachers increased
- continuously around 70% while applicants of English language showed at just only 40%.

- Meanwhile, from 2005 to 2006 the same trend again is served by both subjects;
- but athowever, in the end of the period rose minimally to 73% , whereas in 2007
- recruitment of English teachers still dropped to underdeeper to 20 percent,
- it was approximately by 45% from the applicant of French language teacher.

There you have it Rahmat, you just have a few needed remarks on the construction of your essay, overall, it's well written and you have covered all the necessary information needed to analyze the graph properly.


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