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IELTS WRITING TASK 1: REDEVELOPMENT PLANS FOR A UNIVERSITY SPORTS CENTRE



alpaca 1 / -  
May 4, 2025   #1
The two diagrams provided illustrate the proposed enhancements for a university's sports facility.

Overall, it is evident that the centre will undergo significant expansion and enlargement, with the most prominent alteration being the addition of numerous facilities and the dismantlement of the outdoor courts.

To begin with, the largest transformation is that all amenities will be transferred indoors, therefore expanding the area of the centre. To the south side of the building, two new changing rooms will be constructed in the southeast and southwest corners. A new café and sports shop will be introduced near the newly constructed changing facilities. Two dance studios will be incorporated into the centre's far east end. Along the building's eastern axis, to the right of the seating area, a sports hall will be annexed. At the venue's western quadrant, a recreational aquatic facility will be appended.

Regarding internal modifications, the 25m natatorium area will remain the same, except that the fitness facility to the north of the venue will be extended to accommodate the new structure. The reception area is not expected to undergo any further improvements.

In conclusion, the diagrams indicate that the university sports facility will experience various major developments, most likely to support a higher volume of university students.

P/s: Could you mark my essay based on the IELTS band from 1.0 to 9.0 and give me some instructions on how to improve it? Thanks a lot.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15634  
May 11, 2025   #2
The report is over written. You should not write more than 200 words because this is only a 20 minute task. You should reserve the longer writing time for the task 2 essay, which is more complicated to write and is scored more on quality of writing rather than the information reporting being done in the task 1 essay.

It is important to write 2-3 sentences for the summary overview in the task 1 essay. You lose points when you compress your information presentation this way. Use one sentence per presentation idea to meet the requirement and increase your scoring potential.

Your presentation is not properly formatted. You should first describe the original layout of the sports facilities before you proceed to reporting the upcoming changes in the last paragraph. There is no need to present a concluding paragraph in the Task 1 essay. That is not a requirement as the report does not follow the task 2 writing format.


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