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IELTS - To reduce traffic in cities, we should reduce traveling by people


hoshmp 2 / 3  
Sep 20, 2012   #1
Topic: the only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education and shopping.

Traffic is a global problem, nowadays developed and underdeveloped countries both are suffering from traffic problem. Cities like Beijing, New Delhi and Karachi are always worst in traffic. To overcome this problem governments and people have to work together with some possible solutions.

I agree somewhat on this option, that traffic can be lowered by decreasing the need of people to come out on roads with vehicles. In this advanced world it is now possible for people to perform some of their routine work from homes. They can do shopping through online stores and thy will not need to go out to get their goods. The delivery boy can carry goods of many people in one round. Definitely it will work to some extent to overcome this problem. Distance learning, like to get enrolled in some online courses, people can learn and get education while staying at home. There are some works also which we can do at homes, like making applications for computers, some handicraft work. So the job providers can also engage people at work and they can carry their outputs in one round from their homes.

However, this is not the only option of controlling traffic problem. There are only limited course which can we learn at homes. I will give here example of my own field and a veterinary medicine student; I can not learn clinical skills without going to field or in animal hospital. Likewise an engineer can not learn their skills at staying at home using this distance learning option. On other hand there are only limited jobs which we can perform from home. However considering this option we should also look on other useful options like, making public transport easily available and cheap so people can turn towards to avail this facility. Similarly, Educating people by seminar to teach them that avoid the unnecessary use of vehicles. If distance of your destination is very short you should go through walk, it is better for health as well.

i will conclude by saying that, I agree with this option that we can reduce the traffic by reducing the need to come out. But this is not the only valuable option. We should also consider other good options to overcome this global problem.

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Sep 23, 2012   #2
Traffic is a global problem, nowadays developed and underdeveloped countries both are suffering from traffic problem.
Or you could say it like this: "Currently, a significant worldwide problem is major traffic in all types of countries."

In order t o overcome this problem, governments and people have to work together with some possibleto create solutions.

I agree somewhat on this option, that traffic can be lowered by decreasing the need of people to come out on roads with vehicles.
Maybe say this: "I believe that a good way to reduce traffic is to decrease the need for people to drive and commute."

They can do shopping through online stores and thy will not need to go out to get their goods.
You could say: "Shoppers can save time and gas money by using the internet to buy goods."

Distance learning, like to get enrolled in some online courses, people can learn and get education while staying at home.
Maybe say this: "The government could fund more programs for distance learning, so people can take online courses while studying at home."

However considering this option We should also look onconsider other useful optionssolutions like m aking public transport easily available and cheapaffordable.so people can turn towards to avail this facility.
OP hoshmp 2 / 3  
Sep 25, 2012   #3
Thank You Jennifer for your useful suggestion. i will again write to improve it. thanks.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Sep 25, 2012   #4
nowadays both developed and underdeveloped countries both are suffering from traffic problem.

You have taken a good entrance to your topic in the introductory para. However, I feel it is better that you state your opinion on the argument before you finish the introduction.

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