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The regular distance of travel using various type of transportation, and measured in miles


Jordansimons 3 / 4  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The table shows the regular distance of people traveling that measured based on miles of travelled between 1985 and 2000. Overall, it is noticeble, that inhabitant prefered to choose a car rather than walked for hanging out in both different years.

By 1985, the figure had shown accuratelly, that the proportion of inhaitand walked traveling account for 255 miles during a year. By contrast with car usage, the average travelled up to 3.1995 miles, the car usage tenfold from walked distance accumulation. In 2000, the average distance of travelled by car was increase dramatically up to 4.806 miles while the number of people travelled on foot decreased slightly to 237 miles. we can see that the inhabitant were more likely to travel by car over the ten years.
Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hi Jordan, I have some suggestions for you

First, presenting the question is a need

Overall, it is noticeblenoticeable, that inhabitant preferedpreferred to choose a car rather ...

By 1985, the figure had shown accuratellyaccurately , that the proportion of inhaitandinhabitants walked traveling account ...

be careful of minor mistake like misspelling

To vary the sentences "trip or tour or having journey" can replace 'travelled'

Keep writing. Best regards.
Wilyaftika23 46 / 37 1  
Oct 30, 2016   #3
1. spelling
noticeble------------> noticeable
prefered -----------> preferred
travelled--------------> traveled
accuratelly ---------> accurately
inhaitand------------> inhabitant
2. The table shows the regular distance of people traveling that measured based on miles of travelled between 1985 and 2000
--->The table shows the regular distance of people traveling that measured based on miles between 1985 and 2000.
3. Repetitive
car------> car driver without passenger
walked-------> pedestrians, walking, walkers

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