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Regulating Advertising - let the Ministry of Truth decide


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Dec 7, 2016   #1
In recent year, nowadays, the vast expansion in international trade affect development advertising is higher. Some people argue that is not popular because the companies are sold. I agree with this point of view.

In my opimion, advertising is necessary in free maket economices and they need to tell customers about their products. Also, advertisements inform us about the choices while we have consider about large products. Furthermore, online advertising is the most common type today. They will control hight efficiency. For example, companies can see how many people saw their advertising and traffic for information everyday.

Customers who are interesten in products or services, they will easily be sent to a content containing information through a free utility. It is a form of harmful modern business.

I also agree with the view that advertising is not the real needs of society which they are sold. In my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous, popular actors and singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that their fovourite singer advertise, although they do not really need their product. Moreover, advertising manipulates people because it aims to persude their that buying a product will make them happier, stronger, healthier, and more other reasons. For example, many people believed that if they use of vitamins or foods nutritional supplements, it will make healthy their body. However, the researchers pointed out that the abuse cause many side effects and fatigue. On the other hand, advertisers often aim their maketing at children who can easily be influenced by advertisements. Then, children always put pressure on their parents to buy them things.

In conclusion, advertising is a key part of modern business but it is should be regulated. Government should censor and control false information that are harmful.

Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Dec 7, 2016   #2
Ha, it is extremely difficult for me to review your essay for a number of reasons. The first one, is the lack of the original prompt requirement. That is the guideline by which I can properly assess your work for task compliance and discussion accuracy. At the moment, I am unclear as to what the actual slant of the discussion topic should be. Please post that prompt as soon as you can for a more accurate review of your work on the essay.

In the meantime, I would like to call your attention to the grammar problems in your essay. You misspelled so many words within the overall essay that you would not get a very good score in terms of grammar range and accuracy. The highest you would probably get is a 3 which, as you know will drag down the final score calculations for your task test. Examples of the misspelled words are opimion = opinion, hight = height, interesten = interested, etc. Please make sure to take your time while typing your essay. I am not, at this moment, sure if you just have typographical errors or if you really do not know how to spell these words. Either way, your score in this section would be less than passing.


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