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IELTS TASK 2 - the relations between nature and training abilities


riankia 1 / 1  
Jun 19, 2015   #1
It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about the relations between nature and training abilities. From my personal perspective, I believe that children should be properly equipped and own inborn talents as an example sport, art or music.

On the one hand, having a natural talent of each child is a special gift. It is undeniable that the innate abilities can not be taught by the great teachers or gainedly doing practice frequently. It, therefore, highlights a great deal of difference between one child and another child in order to become a excellent sport player or an musical prodigy. A typical example is that Mozart was known as a gifted musican in the history of the music world when he was young.

Many people, on the other hand, argue that all babies can be educated to achieve distinguished skills even though they would spent much of their time practicing. For instance, my cousin was guied to play badminton by his teacher with hard-working improvement despite having no natural aptitude for playing badminton, as a result of gaining plenty of rewards.It is a patent fact that smashing musicians or illustrious artistis as well as international sport stars would probably succeed if having both training and innate talent. Without the innate aptitude, continuous training need be a lot of time and perseverance and without the training, children would not learn how to develop their talents.

In conclution, there is a trong connection between education and inborn gift. It seems to me that a successful person in terms of art, sport or music should be combined with both of those.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jun 19, 2015   #2
between nature and training abilities

This does not cover the whole opinions in the topic. In my opinion, it should be:
People have different views towards the role of nature and nurture in determining the talent of a sportsperson or a musician.

I believe that children should be properly equipped (by/with what?) and own inborn talents as an example sport, art or music.

This sentence lacks clarity. What do you mean by "equipped and own inborn talents"?

having a natural talent of each child is a special gift

some people were born with a natural talent

It is undeniable that thesome innate abilities can not be taught by the great teachers or gainedly doing practice frequently

You could give an example to strengthen your point.

as a result of gaining plenty of rewards

. "As a result of" is wrongly used in this sentence.
Nevertheless, he has won a variety of honors and achievements.

Without the innate aptitude, continuous training need be a lot of time and perseverance and without the training, children would not learn how to develop their talents.

You should add "However" at the beginning of this sentence. Otherwise, this is not aligned with the rest of the paragraph where you clarify the significance of nurture in arts and sports.

a strongconnection between education and inborn gift

I'm not sure if you did state it clearly in your essay. Actually, this should be the connection between either nature or nurture and a person's abilities.

Hope it helps!
OP riankia 1 / 1  
Jun 21, 2015   #3
@MisterWandering: thanks your advice and I'll check my essay <3


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