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Nowadays, there remain misconceptions relating to the gender inequality.


drhung 1 / -  
Sep 4, 2015   #1
[Ielts task 2 - Discus] Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities.

Nowadays, there remain misconceptions relating to the gender inequality. To be specific, many people contend that some occupations are more suitable for men than for women and vice versa. This has been argued and interpreted via providing a diversity of reasons of their personal features and capacities. I am in two minds about this idea. In this essay, I will support my view with examples.

It is true to tell that many jobs requiring strength and health are specialized for men. As Vietnamese ancient people believed that "men are the main pillar of the house and women are responsible for taking care of their children and supporting domestic works". Take airmen as an example, pilots of airlines in Vietnam are all men. This is due to the fact that these technology and engineering specializations have some specific priorities for males. Consequently, women are discriminated in terms of finding these similar jobs, although they are quite passionate about it.

Returning to the other side of the problem, I claim that this conception listed contributes to the gender discrepancies. This will lead to an undeniable fact that females do not get chance to perform what they like and so do men. In fact, scientists around the world illustrate that an individual's advantages might be other's weaknesses. Hence, it is clear that we all the equality in access to employment opportunities which depend on our expectations and abilities as well. Shinawatra, for instance, is the first female Prime Minister who is also well-known as an entrepreneur and politician.

By way of conclusion, I partially agree with this opinion and sometimes it is not the case. From my point of view, I think that we all need to set criteria for each professional. From that, we choose the best working place that satisfies our conditions.

lcturn87 - / 435 236  
Sep 18, 2015   #2
I would like to give you some assistance with your essay.

1st paragraph: I think you begin the first sentence with "Today" and delete the word "the" in this sentence. Here is a suggestion for this sentence: "This has been argued and interpreted via by providing a diversity of reasons such as personal features and individual capacities." (I'm unsure if you are describing looks and talents).

I think you should have a better thesis. Ex: "I am conflicted about this idea." "However, I think that we all need to set criteria for every professional." (The last sentence was taken from your last paragraph. It helps when you restate your thesis in your conclusion. I think you did this, but it was unclear to the reader in the introductory paragraph.)

3rd paragraph: I'm unsure about the first sentence: Returning to the other side of the problem On the other hand, I claim I think that the misconception that is listed contributes to the gender discrepancies." "Hence, it is clear that we all the equality in access to employment opportunities, which depend on our expectations and abilities as well."

I think the second paragraph discusses the difference between men and women, but the third paragraph has very little information about women and seems to discuss both genders. You could discuss how women are different than men.

I hope this helps!


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