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This is report to describe the process of collecting information for the weather forecast


MaximKlopunov99 13 / 22 4  
May 3, 2016   #1
Hello, can you give me all your suggestions about my 20 minutes writing task?

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

This is the report to describe the process of collecting information by producing the up-to-the-minute weather forecast you can rely on.
The weather forecast is made on the basis of incoming information collected from 3 types of sources: from space, from ground and from water. The information from space is received by satellites. Besides the data from space, synoptics get the information from above ground meteorological stations by means of radars. The data from water are captured by drifting buoys and then reflected on synoptic charts. In order to produce reliable forecasts meteorologists analyze the primary infos such as: satellite photos, radar screen and synoptic charts. All this is compiled and transmitted to the broadcasting center to prepare the broadcast.

Finally, the weather broadcast is broadcasted through TV, radio and telephone number information system. Thus, we get to know the up-to-the-minute weather forecast via news and telephone services.



aviniwirastri [Contributor] 10 / 35 11  
May 3, 2016   #2
This is the report to describe the process of collecting information by the Australian Bureau of Meteorologybyin producing the up-to-the-minute weather forecast you can rely on.

The weather forecast is made on the basis of incoming information collected from 3 types of sources: from space, from ground and from water. The information from space is received by satellites. Besides the data from space, synoptics get the information from above ground meteorological stations by means of radars. The data from water are captured by drifting buoys and then reflected on synoptic charts. In order to produce reliable forecasts meteorologists analyze the primary infos such as: satellite photos, radar screen and synoptic charts. All data are compiled and transmitted to the broadcasting center to prepare the broadcast.

comments :
your essay is clear and understandable. but a trivial mistake with "by" in the first paragraph can be fatal since it is potential to divert the meaning.

it is less than 150 words, as i count that is only 148 words. we never know the tolerance that is given by the examiner, but i suggest to not write less than 150.

best regards,
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
May 3, 2016   #3
Hi Maxim, first of all, I would like to WELCOME you to the Essay Forum Family, I hope you find this website to be helpful and valuable to your writing pieces, may you also consider us as your go to site for anything that you can think of, we appreciate any discussion, questions and anything that will help you get better, if not the best at this craft.

So, below are my corrections on your analysis.
- This is the report tothat
- describes the process

- The weather forecast is madedone on
- from the ground
- and from the water.
- above ground, meteorological
- from the water are
- on the synoptic charts.
- forecasts, meteorologists
- analyze the primary infosinformation ( avoid cutting back on your words ) such
- All of this
- the broadcastfor broadcasting .

- is broadcastedaired through TV,
- telephone number information system.

There you have it Maxim, I hope this corrections on your analysis, helps and is able to provide you with a far better analysis.
OP MaximKlopunov99 13 / 22 4  
May 4, 2016   #4
Dear Justivy03, I'd like to thank you for your detailed and helpful analysis. I'm planning to take my IELTS examination at the end of June and I hope that this essay forum will help me to get high results in writing essays.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
May 4, 2016   #5
Hi Maxim, it is our pleasure to be able to help you with all your writing article, there's nothing more than words of appreciation from all the people that we are able to help, whenever we log in we hope to hear all your feedback, this is the only way we can get better at this job. Knowing that we are able to help, gives us the fuel to go on, be able to have that strength to continue sharing our passion and fully exercise the language.

Moreover, the IELTS examination may be as taxing as it is, but hey, you can treat it as a normal writing exercise and this should relax you a little bit. Even more so, be confident, know that you have what it takes to ace this examination and to prove, not to anyone, but to yourself, that the English language is one challenge that you are ready to take on.

Finally, practice, practice, practice, as I always mention, this is the only way you can better and I believe, this is not just on academics but to life in general.I hope to see more of your writing pieces soon.


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