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IELTS - Report an island before and after construction


seabird88 2 / 3 1  
May 26, 2013   #1
TOPIC: (Cam 9, Test 1 Part 1)
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where revelents.

P/S: Hi everybody, this is the first time i post my writing text. Please give me your advice. Thanks a lot

ANSWER:

The two maps illustrate the change of an island over years because of the development for tourism. Overall, the island experienced significant changes with the build of many facilities.

To begin with, the first map describes the land before construction with only trees in the east and the west of the land. The huge land is about 250 metres with the large beach in the west.

Moving on to the second map after construction, we can see a lot of facilities were built in the island. First of all, buildings were raised in two areas of the land. While some mushroom houses are in the centre of the land, the others are near the beach in the west. Footpaths were also constructed around accommodation units for tourist walking and that of western area leads to the beach for swimming. Between two accommodation areas, there are a big restaurant and a reception hall. A vehicle track surrounds the hall and reach to the pier where people can go sailing in the south sea of the island.

Habib Rastegar 8 / 18 1  
May 26, 2013   #2
The two maps illustrate

The comparison of the two maps

change of an island

the changes of an island

the development for tourism

the development of tourism industrial

with the build

with the constructing many buildings and other facilities

To begin with, the first map describes the land before construction with only trees in the east and the west of the land

To begin with, the first map describes the land before construction with only trees in the east and the west of the land
OP seabird88 2 / 3 1  
May 27, 2013   #3
Thanks Habib Rastegar for your feedback :d
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 27, 2013   #4
Overall, the island experienced significant changes with the build of many facilities

Overall, this island has experience significant changes with the introduction of new tourist facilities.

To begin with, the first map describes the land before construction with only trees in the east and the west of the land.

In summaries, you need to skim the essesence for writing. So you need to cut down addtitional phrases and words which do not directly cotribute to the idea. You can certainly do away with "To begin with".
shaddy 17 / 47 7  
May 28, 2013   #5
we can see a lot of facilities were built in the island

...we can see that a lot of facilities were built in the island.

there are is a big restaurant and a reception hall


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