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Report- The number of vehicles crossing the Waterloo Bridge.


xucoi 14 / 41 10  
Jun 15, 2013   #1
Hi guys. This is the first report that bases on statistics. I find it so hard when I begin to write this. May I have not been familiar with this analyzing topic. Please help me broaden my poor idea. Thank you very much. :D

Write a short report that coveys the following information.
The table shows the number of the passenger cars and Lorries traversing the Waterloo Bridge at each day, from Sunday to Saturday, of a week. The highest number of passenger cars going over the Bridge is 2000 at Sunday, Monday and Friday. Whereas, that of Lorries is 2000 only at Tuesday. Thursday is the time which has the equal number of 2 kinds of vehicle. The best notice is the unusual up-and-down number of lorries. They only have 500 at Sunday and Saturday, 1000 at Wednesday and Friday. For passenger cars, they still maintain at 1500 at the remainder of a week. One more thing that needs to be observed is the total of number of Passenger cars and Lorries. They are always equitable or lower 3000 each day.



sopha 4 / 5  
Jun 15, 2013   #2
I would say you might to search for IELTS lessons and the look at task 1 writing, there are lots of similar analysis.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jun 16, 2013   #3
The highest number of passenger cars going over the Bridge is 2000 at Sunday, Monday and Friday.

The highest number of passenger cars crossing over the Bridge are recorded as 2000 vehicles on the days of Sunday, Monday and Friday.

Whereas, that of Lorries is 2000 only at Tuesday.

.... you need to combine this line to the previous one if you use "whereas". For example;
The highest number of passenger cars crossing over the Bridge are recorded as 2000 vehicles on the days of Sunday, Monday and Friday whereas the same number of lorries cross over the bridge only on Tuesdays.

Thursday is the timeday which has the equal number of 2both typeskinds of vehicle crossing the bridge .
OP xucoi 14 / 41 10  
Jun 17, 2013   #4
Oh, thanks Dumi and Sopha. I'm also trying to read the samples of report based on statistics. That leads to this first report.:D.

Dumi, I'm enjoying your sentences and wondering that although I always write too much to improve my writing skill. It has never enhanced my skill as I want, as you rewrote for me. Sometimes, It's too tired to try.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jun 17, 2013   #5
Dumi, I'm enjoying your sentences and wondering that although I always write too much to improve my writing skill. It has never enhanced my skill as I want, as you rewrote for me. Sometimes, It's too tired to try.

Don't get tired of writing ... the more you write, the more you become proficient.... Also, it's just not writing alone; It's reading too.... Read others' essays so that you can pick more points and ideas for other essays.

They are always equitable or lower 3000 each day.

They are always lower than the cap of 3000 vehicle each day.
OP xucoi 14 / 41 10  
Jun 18, 2013   #6
Don't get tired of writing ... the more you write, the more you become proficient.... Also, it's just not writing alone; It's reading too.... Read others' essays so that you can pick more points and ideas for other essays.

Thanks Dumi very much. I'm so glad when I join this EF. Place has a great Mod who always inspires members with her enthusiasm. :D. Thanks for everything :D


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