Report - production of colored paper clips.

Hi guys!
This is the first time I practice to write a report for IELTS preparing. And I have tried to follow the rules in my writing book.

1. Terms of reference (what you have been asked to find out)
2. Procedure ( how you found out the information)
3. Findings (what you found out)
4. Conclusions
5. Recommendations.
I hope you guys will give me some comments. I really appreciate your kindness :D.
Here is the topic.
The diagram below illustrates some of the processes in the production of colored paper clips at a small factory. As a member of the Quality Control, you have been asked to comment on the process and to consider whether any changes are necessary.

Here is the diagram: thamtunhatnguyet.com/upanh/server/php/tmp_files/Checking_plastic_paper_clip_NeSj1_20130419154431.png
My essay:
As the QC member, I'm asked for checking the process of producing the color paper clips. The system has operated as well as possible, but I also suggest some recommendations aimed at reaching better productivity.

The process works as follows: to begin with, the molten plastics flow into separate color channels which are red, blue and yellow to transform plastic's original color for each product. These grooves lead plastic to molds to sharp their forms. After that, uncompleted products are involves in testing carefully by 2 tools which are machine check and plastic strength. If they have adaptations these requirements, they pass to next period. Otherwise, they are rejected to the inception. Then, the moldings are sorted deliberately by hand to divide into 2 parts which are mixed colors and single colors. Next, the QC exhibits final test to check whether the products have enough conditions namely color checking to release or not. If they are not meet to demand, then they turn back to the "sort by hand" part. Finally, the products are packed and dispatch to the customers.

Although the system is still good as before, I have an idea that we will replace the "sort by hand" stage by sort by identified machines. It will reduce the labors and remove the color checking period because these machines will take over it for us.

Hi xycoi,
First, you can upload the diagram using the "Attach file" facility... It is a lot better than giving the link. Without having the diagram with your post, it is unlikely that you get meaningful comments for your thread. So, do it next time.


... as well as possible? Cannot get your idea here :(


I intend to make my recommendations that are aimed at enhancing the current level of productivity.

The process works as follows: to begin with first, the molten plastics flow into separate color channels which are red, blue and yellow to transform plastic's original color for each product.

Oh. Thank you Dumi very much :D
I will attach picture file in the next time.


Oh Dumi, I means the system worked at best as it can in current time. So i use as well as possible. Is it wrong? :D

By the way, is it ok if I give a short recommendation?
I'm so glad to receive your comments Dumi :P

I think your idea does not come right the way it is expressed.


You can say; The performance of this system is quite satisfactory. However, I intend to make a few recommendations in hope of further improving its productivity.


I think they expect it. You need to include every feature they expect. Next time, upload the diagram and type the prompt as well... Then I can check whether your response is aligned with the prompt.


... sure .... glad to comment on your threads :)