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The report about ten nations dominating the world in the rice industry in thousands of tons


Hannah Trang 1 / 1  
Aug 16, 2019   #1

Writing task 1 of The Ielts exam



This is the report about ten nations dominating the world in the rice industry in thousands of tons (tot) in 1999.
Overall, it is evident that on the global scale, 9 of 10 countries came from Asian, whereas there was only the USA. While China experienced the greatest amount of rice planted, the US truly stood at the lowest level.

As is shown by the bar graph, the whole of the rice production in China and India accounted for extremely high degrees (192,971 and 122,244 tot respectively) in 1999. In descending order, such countries as Indonesia, Bangladesh, Viet Nam, Thailand, Malaysia and Japan, achieved figures on a scale from 12 to 47 tot.

In addition to that, it is obvious to clarify Philipines produced nearly 2 tot more rice than the US in the year mentioned

Maria - / 1,099 389  
Aug 17, 2019   #2
@Hannah Trang
Hello. Welcome to the forum. I hope you find the feedback helpful. And if you do, you can always come back for more.

Please do note that it would be helpful if you can provide us with a photo of the graph to assist us assessing your written work.

Remember to be consistent when writing academically. This is critical. It is essential that you write with ease by having proper transitions and appropriate pauses. If you do this, you'll immprove the overall flow of writing.

The last paragraph also appears to be quite out of place. You can utilize this space to conclude your writing clearer. Doing so will help readers fully understand the context you're working with.
OP Hannah Trang 1 / 1  
Aug 18, 2019   #3
@Maria
thank you so much, I'll fix my error


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