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This representative table provides info on the quantity of students qualified for teaching English


Meirama91 8 / 9 2  
May 17, 2016   #1
Hello friends, i'm mei . it would be great if you give me some suggestions for this essay, thanks in advance :)
question:
The table below shows the number of students living in the UK gaining English language teacher training qualifications in 2007/8 and 2008/9, and the proportion of male qualifiers.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


This representative table provides information on the quantity of students in the United Kingdom who passed qualifications for English Teacher in two academic period, 2007/8 and 2008/9, with the percentages of the male student. Overall, it can seen that in all qualifications, the number of women is predominate more than men and the percentages of men is slightly decreasing in year by year.

In detail, the total of student remained stable in both years, but there was a significant differences between the each sexes. In first period, 2007/8, the quantity of male students only 24,7% from total. Move to more detail, stood at 6,870 of the male student took TEFL qualification compared to female who got three times higher. The gap became more significant for Cambridge UCLES, CELTA & other degree, which men only got a one in four of the women's total.

The trend was similar for the second period, but it is noticable that the number of male puppils was more smaller than previous period. In 2008/9, for Cambridge UCLES, CELTA & other degree, there was a drop of almost 10% in thenumber of male who gained this qualification compare to 2007/8 term. Although, there was not much changes in TEFL qualification group in this certain period.


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akbartaufiq25 7 / 81 54  
May 18, 2016   #2
Mei, your efforts in polishing your writing is a remarkable one. I noticed that you posted more than two essays in a day which is truly a hard work to me. You gain some improvements in this writing. However, you must learn from your mistakes because there are several repetitive issues from the previous essays.

"Overall, it can seen that in all qualifications(you still have the same problem with the use of "be"), the number of women is predominate more thanthe men.and(it is better to separate this sentence)Thus, the percentages of men is slightly decreasing in year by year."

"..but there was a significant differences between the each sexesmale and female percentages ."
"In the first period, 2007/8,.."
"..the number of male pup pils was more smaller than.."
"AlthoughStill, there was not muchany changes in TEFL qualification group in this certain period."

I am sure that once you keep learning the errors, your success in the IELTS, specifically in the writing test, is assured. 100% guaranteed. Stay positive and keep practicing!


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