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The Republic of China: A state-backed up a firm that is developing a gigantic space ship


Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 10, 2016   #1
IELTS Summary Task China plans world's biggest spaceplane to carry 20 tourist

Nowadays, Republic of China cannot hold the lure of extra terrestrial tourism. A state-backed firm is developing a gigantic space plane. This space plane can fly up to more than 20 passengers to sky space - significantly more people than any other commercial spaceflight firm has pledged to fly to date. Before realized, the test flights will be finished in the next two years, because almost all of the engineering tests have been finished and all the subsystems of the test vehicle worked very well. Moreover, The China Academy of Launch Vehicle Technology in Beijing has designed a simple, one-piece space plane whose design can be scaled up to carry more people. The academy will have several competitors such as Virgin Galactic, whose SpaceShipTwo aero plane will offer six passengers trips to near-space, and XCOR, whose proposed Lynx vehicle will fly a single passenger seated beside a pilot. They have designed a winged rocket that takes off under its own power. The vehicle will take off vertically like a rocket and land on the runway automatically without any ground or on-board intervention.

Hujjatul19 45 / 70 3  
Nov 10, 2016   #2
Hi Dioba, here is some suggestions for you

Firstly, it is a crucial thing to attach the source of the article.

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... in Beijing has designed a simple a noun is needed here to form a noun phrase , probably way

Best Regards.
justivy03 - / 2,370 607  
Nov 10, 2016   #3
HI Dioba, here's another one from my end.

- Nowadays,the Republic of China
- A state-backed up a firm that is developing a gigantic space planeship .
- This space planeship can fly up to more than 20 passengers
- to the sky space -
- spaceflight firm hasever pledged to fly to date.
- Before its realizationrealized ,
- because almost all of the engineering tests havehas been finished
- The ChinaChinese Academy
- space planeship whose design can be scaled
- up to carry more people.
- offer six passengers trips to near- space, and XCOR,

There you have it Dioba, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and should you need further assistance do let us know, we are here for you.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Nov 10, 2016   #4
MESMERIZED BY YOUR OUTSTANDING VOCABULARY AND STRUCTURE ON YOUR SUMMARY, I TYPE THESE SENTENCES ON GOOGLE AND, GOTCHA, I FOUND MANY ARTICLES WITH VERY SIMILAR SENTENCES WITH YOURS. THUS, YOU NEED TO SHOW MORE EFFORT ON PARAPHRASING OR AT LEAST DO NOT JUST COPY PASTE IT. WE KNOW IT.

A state-backed firm is [...] firm has pledged to fly to date.

The China Academy of Launch Vehicle ...

Then, I have nothing to do with your essay since I realized that actually this is not 'yours'. Paraphrasing is really beneficial for you, ultimately on IELTS, so practice more to do it well. Need to understand first what you read before you can paraphrase it since paraphrasing means you rewrite the sentences using your own vocabulary without alter the meaning or the real intention of the sentences. Good luck on your study


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