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A research published that the amount of ivory elephants in Africa were significantly decreased


PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Oct 4, 2016   #1
A legal trade of ivory would wipe out elephants

Recently, a research published that the amount of ivory elephants in Africa were significantly decrease of demand to overseas. It caused by legalizing trade. The study also announced that ivory demand is twice greater than amount of ivory. Now, number of elephants are decline significantly. In fact, demand for ivory in Asia that these some 27,000 elephants are killed a year. It was against ivory trade that some countries around the world are set to discuss about international ivory trade which banned 1989. Some argued that the illegal trade would decline as result of legal sale ivory. However, others argued that a legalized trade will bring some elephant populations are increase enough. Zimbabwe and Namibia where both proposed bring back the trade on the ivory. Next, these scenario would happen that looked by new study had result which these countries have quotas high enough to meet demand. It meant, over-exploitation drive elephants in danger.
Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Oct 4, 2016   #2
Hi PHA

Let me give you some advice

... elephants in Africa were significantly decrease(decreased) of demand to overseas. It caused by legalizing(legalising) trade.
... demand is twice greater than (an) amount of ivory. Now, (a) number of elephants ...
It was against (an) ivory trade that some ...
... bring some elephant populations are increase(increased) enough.
Next, these(this) scenario would (...) had (a) result which these countries ...

just some misspelt words here
and a little of a grammatical mistake...
Thank you...


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