Some grammatical errors in there that you have to correct:
the station should devote more time for weather and local news
- more time
to ...
but also doesn't consider others reason
- consider
other reasons ...
benefit from implementing anor end survey
though there have been cancellation of advertising
-
cancellations in advertising
details about the reasons of this cancellation
-
reasons behind these cancellations ...
The author doesn't consider others solution
-
other solutionsnew movies instead of old one
- old
onesviews sport programs
-
showing sports programs...
attract more viewer
- viewer
salso advertiser
- advertiser
sThe argument could be strengthen
- strengthen
edother solution
- solution
sThe argument could be further strengthen if the author define vague terms as well as provide more information about the evidence.
- the argument could be further
strengthened if the author
defines vague terms as well as provides...
The strikeout means to delete and the red fonts are the correct ones that should replace the deleted words. I hope this helps. It is really a well thought out and analytical essay. Good luck with it :-)