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Resume - New National Monument Created in Maine's North Woods


aidafitria18 9 / 14 1  
Aug 25, 2016   #1
The 87.500 acres of forestland was donated by Elliotsville Plantation to the federal government in Maine's North Woods. Then it designated by Barack Obama as the new national monument on Wednesday, 24th August.

This is the second national monument that has been designated after Acadia national Park. The White House said it would be protect the Penobscot River Branch - Stunning East, the rich biodiversity on the woods, and the outstanding geology.

The land is truly need a status of National Park because it is the home of lynx, bears, trout, and other important species. Obama has suggested to designate other monuments in the country before his term ends in January. Now, some monuments have protected more land and water than before.

Source: nationalgeographic.com
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 25, 2016   #2
Hi Aida..
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I have read this summary closely. Let me help you to finalize this. Please, you meet footnotes of your writing.


The 87.500 acres of forestland was WERE donated by Elliotsville ...
Then it WAS designated by Barack Obama ...
The White House said it would be protectED BY the Penobscot River Branch ...
The land is truly needS a status of National Park (...) and other important ENDANGERED species.

Note:
Make you sure that you create the paragraph consisting more than 2 sentences. You should make a sentence systematically rather than it includes more paragraph jumping. In the first sentence, you should introduce your article before you summarize that. " AN ARTICLE IN A NATIONAL GEOGRAPHIC'S WEBSITE PUBLISHED THAT OBAMA ..............

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