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Article Review: Mini Dog Robot can Bounce, Open Doors and even Climb Fences


Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Oct 6, 2016   #1
Ghost Minitaur, the newest version of a dog robot is capable of cross obstacle-strewn terrain impassable to wheeled and tracked robots, it can also climb stairs and chain-link fences. The current version of Minitaur weighs 6 kilogrammes and can crawl, sidle crabwise or rear up against a vertical surface. Attachment to the end of robot's leg allows it to open door handles as well as to grip and climb fences.

The electronic are built using off-the-shelf components. This means that, although each robot currently cost around $10,000 to make, this should drop below $1500 when production ramps up. Minitaur seemingly useful to the emergency services when disaster and US military are likely to be interested in Minitaur as a sensor platform for bomb disposal and urban reconnaissance. But we quite fancy just having one to greet us when we come home from work.
korbansuspendcuy 8 / 18  
Oct 6, 2016   #2
Hi Yo..
I have some comments..

... a dog robot is capable of cross[crossing] obstacle-strewn terrain ...
The current version of Minitaur weighs[is weight] 6 kilogrammes and can ...
[The] Attachment to the end of ...

... each robot currently cost [costs] around $10,000 (...) when production ramps [are] up.
But[Nevertheless,] we quite fancy just ...

I hope it helps..
PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Oct 6, 2016   #3
Hello Yonathan,

The current version of Minitaur weighs 6 kilogrammes and can crawl, sidle crabwise ... YOUR SENTENCE NEED VERB

Attachment toOF the end of robot's leg ...

The electronic areWAS built using ...

... when disaster and US military are likely to be interestedBETTER YOU PUT ONLI ONE VERB IN ONE SENTENCESTO BE INTERESTED in Minitaur as a sensor ...

Hope These Help
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Oct 7, 2016   #4
Hi Yonathan,
Actually, it is a good summary. However, let me help you to finalize this. Meet my notes and review them


... impassable to wheeled and tracked robots,.(well, placing a comma or period is a tiny error. However, it can determine whether your sentence is true or not. You have to remember that each sentence only has one main verb so that when there are two main verbs and do not have a conjunction, it is a major mistake) it can also climb stairs ...

This means that, although each robot currently HAS cost around $10,000 to make IT, this should drop below $1500... ButHOWEVER,(You need a linking word, not connecting conjunction) we quite fancy just having one ...


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