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IELTS Task 1: Road problem near by my house.


pdeep37 6 / 13  
Oct 16, 2015   #1
There is a problem in the road outside your house.
Write a letter to your local councilor. In your letter
=introduce yourself
=explain what the problem is
=tell the councilor what you would like to be done

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention regarding problem we are currently facing.

My name is Pdeep Tha. I am working as telecom engineer in national telecom and leaving in New baneshwor sankhamul radha road block no. 80 since 2000 along with my family.

Recently, due to last week heavy rain, a large hole has been observed on the almost center of the road in front of my house. During raining, the pothole fills with water and also not easily visible for the drivers. Due to this slowly other part of road is also being damaged.

Our local community member already tried to contact with road construction Govt. Org., but they are not responding. Therefore we would like to request you to look after this issue personally and take immediate action to heal the damaged road, to protect the possible casualties as early as possible.

Thank You
Your Sincerely,
Pdeep Tha

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Dear, Please comments,
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Oct 16, 2015   #2
Pradeep, the letter is good. However, it contains information that is not really necessary for your councilor to know about. There is actually a better way of writing this letter. I hope you won't get angry that I keep on showing you examples of how to better write your letters. I just think that it is the best way you show you how to properly write the letter :-)

Dear Councilor X,

I am Pradeep Tha, one of your constituents living at New Baneshwor Sankhamul Radha Road Block No. 80.I am writing this letter to you in order to call your attention to a road problem being faced by my street at the moment.

A pothole has developed in the middle of the road that happens to be right in front of my house. The pothole was caused by the week-long rains last October 1 - 7, 2015. The pothole, which continues to fill with water up to this day, poses a danger not only to my family, but to the drivers who use the road as well. When it rains, the pothole cannot be seen due to the water buildup, causing cars to fall into the deepening pothole. My own wife fell into the pothole on October 9 during heavy rainfall because she did not see the pothole. So the pothole does not only cause road damage, but it also poses a danger to those living in the area.

Our local community efforts to contact govt.org in order to have the local government address the road problem has gone unheard. As a representative of the community, I hope that you will be able to represent us with the proper government agencies in order to request for their immediate action regarding the necessary road repair.

I know that you will do your best to protect your constituents and their interests. Thank you.

Your Sincerely,
Pdeep Tha
OP pdeep37 6 / 13  
Oct 16, 2015   #3
I am really happy to see your comments and suggestion, looking forward to see more. Because of your comments and suggestions i am learning a lot. Thanks for your suggestions and still looking for more.


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