I am pleased to read your essay. Such a great writing with nice ideas!
However, let me try to give you feedback.
Here we go,
Humans have promoted heated debate about the widespread use of artificial intelligence in various areas. While some argue that robots pose a threat to society as a whole , I believe that robots are playing an increasingly important role in human's development.
I think you have not answer the task responses. Your overview and thesis statement should be complete. The easiest ways to create this part are to paraphrase the prompt and to write your main idea briefly. So, your readers have an illustration what will you explain in your narration. I redden your sentences, you need to cite the opposite argument with your own words.
Perhaps, you can use this one :Some people argue that robots pose a threat to society as a whole, but others believe that this smart machine can be useful for humans life in the future. In my opinion, while the robots bring some drawbacks, I totally agree that it will assist people in particular works such as industry and household
2. After you explain drawbacks and benefits of robots, you should explain your personal views in body 3 paragraph for answering completely the prompt : give your personal view
You also can strengthen your conclusion with collaborate your thesis statement and summarize the main ideas from body paragraphs. Moreover, your readers will understand clearly your opinion in this essay.I hope it helps, Good Luck then :)