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The role of women - they should not sit at home if they don't want to


eynar 1 / 1  
Nov 17, 2012   #1
The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years. Many of the problems young people now experience such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and aren't at home to care for their children. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this opinion[b]

Position of women in society has been increased higher and wider. They can take participation in solving some serious problems, work on the high post. But they have their children who must be under control and care. Someone thinks it is wrong, others think it is right.

Nowadays women spend a big amount of time on their jobs. I think it is a good decision. First of all, it is making the financial status of a family better. Also some women work the first part of day and at the second part of day care for their children. Children must see that they are under the protection of their parents. And in my opinion they'll instinctively, psychologically think they have responsibility to their parents. I think that we must more think about education of the child instead of taking care of him.

What is about juvenile delinquency, ask you? In my opinion, the behavior of the child depends on his parents, dad or mom. I mean that the child genetically review behavior of his parents. Genetic inheritance plays a big role in the upbringing of the child. It is simply easy. If the child's mom or dad or both of them are very nervous, or very gentle, so these timbers will be passed to their children. And finally it depends on the decision of the child. He could find a bad company, make friends with "bad" guys, and finally he'll imitate all their actions, will take all their bad inclinations. And now is starting the juvenile delinquency. But we can prevent our child from that. We could hire a babysitter with a correct attitude to a life. The parents of the child must teach him what is right and what is wrong. So I think in this case the child will choose correct decision in some vital situations.

In my opinion woman mustn't sit at home from day to day and take a care for her children if she doesn't want that. So I think that the parents must bring up their children in such conditions so he could make a good choice and decision without their presence.

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Nov 17, 2012   #2
Yup :)
I understand your point of view- you agree with mothers going to work, and you give some good reasons for that, but these two things don't really support your argument (Children must see that they are under the protection of their parents. And in my opinion they'll instinctively, psychologically think they have responsibility to their parents.) In this paragraph, give a couple more reasons why it is feasible for a mother to work, and be there for her children as well. Then you can continue into the next paragraph, where your main point is that the child's environment plays a role in his suceptibilty to delinquency. Try to organize your thoughts. The idea of genetics is a weak support for your argument. Also, the decision of the child to hang with a bad crowd is a choice that could be prevented with attentive parenting, by teaching the child over his entire life how to make the best choices. Remember, you need to give reasons to support your viewpoint- that a mother can parent well, even though she is working, so try to keep on topic. I think you have lots of good thought, try to organize them, and edit this a little. If you come u with anything new, post it in this thread and I will read it for you. :)

What is about juvenile delinquency, ask you?
Don't say this as a question, just straight out explain what the concept is, but say it briefly.
OP eynar 1 / 1  
Nov 18, 2012   #3
Jennyflower81
Do u really think so? Thank you for supporting. I'll be glad if my new essay will be read by you :)
narayani - / 2  
Nov 18, 2012   #4
Here is my attempt to write an essay on above topic. If u guys could help me to correct my essay, i would be really grateful towards you. thank you.

It is undeniable fact that, now days women are in more powerful position than they used to be. some people believe that this has made role confusion in society with negative connotation and more children's are engaging in violence and crime, and resulting in juvenile delinquency. Although women power might be a one reason for increasing number of social crime but I don't think it is the main contributing factors.

To began with, it is both parents responsibilities to look after their children in order to make responsible adults in a society. Child with a single dad can be a brightest student in the school where as well look after mummy's boy may commit a crime. Children's violence behaviour depends on environment and cultural of home as well as the society, and how they grew up. To simplify, if we see juvenile delinquency rate in Hampshire is 5% higher than in Surrey in 2005. But women employment rate is higher in Surrey as compare to Hampshire.

And also women can look after their babies and job very well together. With the help of day care centres and nurseries mother can continue their job. Day care centres and nurseries also helps children to socialise in positive way and can learn to co operate with each others. There is however chance of youngsters to go out of track if parents didn't supervise and guide children regularly. Parents should be familiar with children friend circles and asked them to stay away with bad friend if necessary.

To summarise, juvenile delinquency and social crimes and not depends on where their mother is working or not. This alarming problem is manly due to lack to supervision and proper guidance from parents and other senior member of the society. And also the environment is main contributing factor for situation to occur.
Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Nov 23, 2012   #5
I can help you :)

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To begin with, it is both parents'responsibilitiesduty to look after their children, in order to make responsible adults in a society.

A Child with a single dad can be the brightest student in the school, where as a well looked after mummy's boy may commit a crime.

Day care centers and nurseries alsocan help children to socialize in positive ways and can learn to co operate with each other.
narayani - / 2  
Nov 24, 2012   #6
Jennyflower81 , thank u very much, really appreciated :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Nov 24, 2012   #7
They now can take participationpart in solving some serious problemsdecision making activities that only men were allowed to handle in the past

... I think rather than, solving problems, it is the decision making process that earlier women were kept aside... Now they actively get involved in decisions with men : )

But they have their children who must be under control and care. Someone thinks it is wrong, others think it is right.

My suggestion;
But women cannot be rid from their traditional responsibility of caring and nurturing their offspring just because they are more involved with social activities. Due to this reason, some people argue that women should give their priority to the family in the interest of the society.


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