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"The rose of desert" hotel - description of a place I don't recommend


piinka 1 / -  
Jun 5, 2011   #1
Hi :) I have to write a description of a place I dont recommend. I'm Polish and my English is rather poor so please help me! the hotel is imaginary

"The rose of desert" is a 4 star hotel situated in the center of holiday resort, Hurghada. It is a 5-storey building with an interesting and unparalleled architecture, advertised as a great spot to break away from your everyday life.

Well, it definitely is a place which makes your vacation unforgettable - just a pity that because of bad experiences. I came to the hotel with a very good attitude, induced by positive reviews about this place. At first, everything was fine: the taxi driver was uncommonly pleasant and the hotel looked just amazing outside. Unfortunately, crossing the threshold ruined the charm. The first thing I had to deal with was the stuff, unbelievable mean and treated me as I was a nuisance. Second thing was the cafeteria-a complete disaster! The hotel description made me expect a lobster, but all I got was tinned pilchards. In addition, the furnishings were dirty and dusty as if nobody cleaned it for months. That is not all, when I finally managed to get in my room, I experienced even bigger disappointment. "My room with a view" had only one, really small window through which I could see a wall of another hotel. The floor creaked after every move, the bad was close to disintegrate, and the bedclothes-probably white when buying-looked like worms ate some parts of it. Next thing was an entertainment. I was promised it every night, but there was no entertainment at all.

This was without doubt the worst accommodation I have ever stayed in. I am well-traveled and definitely not posh, but this hotel was expected to be luxurious due to quite high price when it clearly was not. It needs to be completely updated if they hope to stay in business and, of course, some charladies must be employed.

Thx ;]

dreamills 1 / 1  
Jun 6, 2011   #2
Here are a few recommended changes:

"The Rose of the Desert" is a 4 star hotel situated in the center of a holiday resort, Hurghada. The hotel is five stories with interesting and unparalleled architecture, advertised as a great spot to break away from your everyday life. Well, the hotel visit will definitely make for an unforgettable vacation, unfortunately, not attributed towards any good experiences. I came to the hotel with a very good attitude, prompted by positive reviews. At first everything was fine, the taxi driver was uncommonly pleasant and the hotel looked amazing from the outside. Unfortunately after crossing the threshold the charm was ruined. The first thing I had to deal with was the staff, unbelievably mean, and treated me as if I were a nuisance. Secondly the cafeteria was a complete disaster! The hotel description had me anticipating lobster, but all I saw were canned sardines! In addition, the furnishings were dirty and dusty, as if nobody cleaned them for months. That is not all, when I finally managed to get to my room I experienced an even bigger disappointment. My room advertised with a view, had only one, very small window through which I could see the wall of another hotel. The floor creaked after my every move, the mattress was close to disintegrating, and the originally white sheets looked like worms had eaten parts for their lunch. My last disappointment was with the live entertainment, I must have imagined it, because there was no entertainment to be found. This was, without doubt, the worst accommodation I have ever stayed in. I am well-traveled and definitely not posh, but this hotel was expected to be luxurious due to the high price when it clearly was not. The Rose of the Desert is due for a complete restoration including with the staff if they hope to stay in business.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jun 7, 2011   #3
For this part, you can also use a capital T:
...most part: The taxi driver was uncommonly pleasant, and the hotel looked just amazing on the ou tside.
I added a few rods...

Unfortunately, crossing the threshold ruined the charm.-----I like this short, intriguing sentence!!

The first thing I had to deal with was the stuff ?? staff? ...the staff. They were unbelievable mean and treated me as if I was a nuisance.

Do this:
My "room with a view" had only one really small window through which I could see a wall of another hotel.----Ha ha, those liars! :-)

Nice job...


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