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Aug 11, 2019   #1

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The tables given provide the information about the sales of fairtrade-labeled coffee and bananas in five European countries, including UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden, in 1999 and 2004.

As for the sales of coffee, the five countries all saw an increase from 1999 to 2004. In 1999, Switzerland sold the greatest amount of fairtrade coffee among the five countries. Meanwhile, in 2004, the UK had the highest sales of fairtrade coffee, and the country also experienced the most dramatic increase of fairtrade coffee sales, 1.5 million euros in 1999 and 20 million euros in 2004, comparing to the other four countries. In contrast, Sweden had the lowest sales of fairtrade coffee in the five countries in 1999 and 2004.

Regarding to the sales of bananas, Switzerland, the UK, and Belgium saw a growth of fairtrade bananas sales from 1999 to 2004. Switzerland took the first place of selling bananas both in 1999 and 2004. In comparison, Belgium sold the least amount of fairtrade bananas in 1999, and Denmark ranked the last in 2004. Besides, the UK saw the most remarkable increase of selling fairtrade bananas from 1999 to 2004, from 1 million euro to 5.5 euros, which was a growth more than five times.

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Aug 12, 2019   #2
The tables given illustrate the sales of ..., including UK, Switzerland, ..., in between 1999 and 2004. (or you can also write from ..... to ...... )

that's all from me, good luck :)
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Aug 13, 2019   #3
Try to post the picture on your article next time~

In your introduction, try to rephrase the sentence instead of copying it.

In the second paragraph, you can express the changes in percentage.
It's much straightforward to name the differences.

... from 1 million euro to 5.5 euros, which was a growth more than five times.
--> two sentences are redundant. leave one of them is enough.

Overall you make a clear comparison between the sales of different items.