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Salmon put their eggs in the upper river which has slow moving currents - facts from this fish life


nurannisaputry92 36 / 27 2  
Apr 4, 2016   #1
The diagrams illustrate the process of how a big fish recognised as salmon life and breed. It is noticeable that there are three steps of salmon's growth from fry to adult.

To begin, salmon put their eggs in the upper river which has slow moving currents and in the opposite between reeds and small stones. This is the appropriate place to protect their eggs from predators, and the eggs will be incubated around 5-6 months. After incubating process, the eggs will change to be a fry which has body's size approximately 3-8 cm. Following this, the fish will adapt in lower rivers which is fast slowing currents in which they will stay at the location for 4 years.

Next, the fish are metamorphosed to be smolt that has 12-15 cm body's long. They will be breed in the open ocean for 5 years, and it will continue until they become grow to be adult salmon. Adult Salmon has a large body about 70-76 cm which can be consumed for society as food chains.



justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Apr 4, 2016   #2
Hi Nur kindly find some help from my side for your analysis.

- a big fish recognised as salmon lifelives and - stepsstages of a salmon's

- To begin, salmon putlays ( put - thing / lay - eggs)
- their eggs in the upper part of the river
- in the opposite between
- After the incubating process,
- the eggs will changeprogress to
- become a fry which has
- a body's size of approximately
- is fast slowing( fast slowing????, I bet you mean "fast moving " ) currents
- in whichwhere they will stay at the location for 4 years.

There you have it Nur, I believe the analysis is written fairly well, you had a different approach towards explaining the detail of the Salmons life cycle and you manage to create a very laid back analysis, of course it's not that it's perfect but it is close, you just have to pay attention to minor details as seen in the above corrections.


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