You have forgotten to respond to the primary question in the required format. An immediate jump to your opinion reason, rather than providing a proper extent response first, delivers an incomplete restatement + opinion paragraph. Therefore, the actual task requirement in relation to the discussion question has not been met. This paragraph instead, creates an alternate discussion point that is not related to the task with the following reason:
Although growth in fuel can have many drawbacks to international progress, this essay agrees that the price of fuel is the primary contributor.
This unrelated response fails to meet task requirements. It offers an unexpected response. Therefore, the discussion is an incorrect prompt response.
Proof-read and edit. One punctuation mark at a time.
the consumption of unrenewable sources leads to traffic congestion such as the greenhouse effect, air pollution, so on
Unrenewable sources are not connected to traffic congestion, but could lead to the other 2 reasons. The sentence lacks competent reasoning and shows a problematic coherence discussion.
Based on these 2 reasons alone, it will suffice to say that the essay is a non-passing piece of writing.