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Saving our ecosystem not by increasing the price of fuels


buithuan 1 / -  
Oct 9, 2021   #1

the best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel



it is sometimes argued about increasing the price of fuels is the world's environmental problem that needs to be under consideration. Although growth in fuel can have many drawbacks to international progress, this essay agrees that the price of fuel is the primary contributor.

There is no question that the advent of modern transportation, as well as increasing number of population,, the factor about time-saving and safe travelling, is on the priority. As a result, the consumption of unrenewable sources leads to traffic congestion such as the greenhouse effect, air pollution, so on. Alternatively, if the government enforces the rule about cost fuel, the company manufacture products that change the direction of using alternative sources and simultaneously climbing the cost of products. This has a considerable impact on the poor and the vulnerable because they do not afford and burden their financial budget about travelling.

That being said, it can see that the strict rule about cost fuel makes residents not reliance on fossil fuel. Furthermore, it is a chance for growing the consumption and technique of consuming and strengthen the dimension of renewable energy. Taking, for example, overload of traffic, a large number of gas and fume is exhausted from vehicles is the key reason making the quality of life more atrocious. It has evidence that there is a lot of disagreement and resentment without clear interpretation is boomed in many places in the world on the purpose of fighting against the ineffectiveness policy.

In summary, although the side of protecting the environment plays pivotal part in our life but increasing cost is not main measure of saving ecosystem. In my opinion, this affair should be under careful consideration.
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Oct 10, 2021   #2
You have forgotten to respond to the primary question in the required format. An immediate jump to your opinion reason, rather than providing a proper extent response first, delivers an incomplete restatement + opinion paragraph. Therefore, the actual task requirement in relation to the discussion question has not been met. This paragraph instead, creates an alternate discussion point that is not related to the task with the following reason:

Although growth in fuel can have many drawbacks to international progress, this essay agrees that the price of fuel is the primary contributor.

This unrelated response fails to meet task requirements. It offers an unexpected response. Therefore, the discussion is an incorrect prompt response.

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Proof-read and edit. One punctuation mark at a time.

the consumption of unrenewable sources leads to traffic congestion such as the greenhouse effect, air pollution, so on

Unrenewable sources are not connected to traffic congestion, but could lead to the other 2 reasons. The sentence lacks competent reasoning and shows a problematic coherence discussion.

Based on these 2 reasons alone, it will suffice to say that the essay is a non-passing piece of writing.
Gnaight 2 / 3  
Oct 11, 2021   #3
I think your essay is totally off topic and the introduction paragraph did not include the topic paraphrase sentence but you just express your opinion. This is not the format of an Ielts writing essay task 2. It can be a deduction when you do the actual test if you still keep this writing style.
William Tran 1 / 4  
Oct 11, 2021   #4
@buithuan
great writing skills and such complicated and academic styles of expressing.
iam5102 2 / 3  
Oct 12, 2021   #5
Your writing is quite off the topic, and I think you should take some time to do research on the proper way of writing essay before jumping right into it. On the other hand, your vocabulary is rich and flexible actually.


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