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School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow

boo2601 2 / 4  
Sep 14, 2014   #1
Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as IT. Many children suffer as a result of these changes. To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving these subjects from school curriculum.

People have different views about whether or not subjects suck as Art, Sport, Music and IT should be included in the curriculum. Personally, while I accept that it is necessary to teach IT in school, I contend that subjects such as Art, Sport and Music should not be eliminated from school curriculum.

On the one hand, subjects such as IT provides essential skills for students' future jobs. The purpose of school is to prepare children for their working life after school so the subjects on curriculum should be relevant to their potential careers. For example, you can not produce a text without basic knowledge about Word, Excel and so on. If students have a chance to study these useful subjects in school, they will have more time to practice and master these skills to survive in workplace. Therefore, I believe that IT should be introduced in school curriculum.

On the other hand, knowledge of Art, Sport and Music help develop aspects of young people's personalities.
vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Sep 14, 2014   #2
While you presented a good discussion of the topic, you could have done a lot more to further assert your stance on the matter. You could have done a comparison of the students who graduated during the time that art, sports, and music were present in the curriculum versus those who graduated without those classes. There are publicly available records that you can access through the internet that prove that having art, sports, and music present in the student curriculum produces well rounded, socially grounded, and responsible individuals. In fact, school sports has even been credited with helping control obesity and encouraging exercise in the past. Then you can compare the students of today who are more IT inclined and thus learn less about social skills and teamwork while in school. By showing the imbalance and effects of the deprivation of those subjects on the students, you will be able to accurately discuss, defend, and conclude your essay. Don't get me wrong. This is a good attempt at answering the prompt. It is just that the essay you wrote has plenty of room left for discussion development and debate. I would hate for you to not have been able to fully discuss the topic. You can still revise this essay in order to add information. I suggest that you do so. Don't worry about the grammar, spelling, or punctuation problems for now. Just develop the discussion into a more solid form for now. The reasons behind your stand and its supporting facts are more important than those errors :)
OP boo2601 2 / 4  
Sep 15, 2014   #3
Related: Essay ideas - students should have more input into the school curriculum

I am doing an essay "students should have more input into the school curriculum" and I am running out of things to say. any ideas would be greatly appreciated.

It depends in part on what age-level students you are talking about. High school? University? Grade school?
Just in general, these are things that come to mind for me:

--students will apply themselves more if they feel they are involved in the process of choosing a curriculum
--students will benefit in the long run from a curriculum which is tailored more to their interests, as they can take courses which propel them along their chosen career path

--students' ideas can bring a fresh perspective to the relevance of courses in the curriculum

I hope this helps!

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